What song but can not be sung
is the music within my soul,
and i've heard it sang far before
pass the cliff of trees and shores
t'was hard to grasp them to stay
wings of notes, I call them that flew away
yes beautiful, pleasent and kind
but a song I could not sing
with a love I could not find
but now my soul she sings within
with a voice just like mine
if only I could sing this song
to your ears, your lovely ears
my heart could find the words
to this song, this song
that sweetly devours
and... if you leave me sadly would be
a cry
a cry I could not sing to you
ohhh one song I can not sing
had to be the love I have for you...
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Comments
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nice song, imagined it as kind fo slow. thanks for entering
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This is very lovely, but I asked that if pre-writes were entered that they have no trophy. Also, song titles weren't used to make this write.
Lovely poem though.
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Beautiful...
if only I could sing this song
to your ears, your lovely ears
I love these lines
I feel them...like I could almost listen to my heart
wanting to sing the song as well
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Lovely piece, I think I read it before, still it captures my senses...
Good job
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
Heba -
Very pretty poem. I love the graphic you chose to compliment it. To me, it speaks of a love that she not only can't speak of but is also forbidden to her. Best of luck in the contest.
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such beauty in words. great job.
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beautiful
I am not sure what else to say. Thank you for entering the contest and good luck.
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I love the spiral sort of spiritual (etheral even?) feel this has, and the rhyming is really nice. Very enjoyable read
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I have noticed quite a spiritual feel inside the lines of this poem, you have written in a beautiful yet soothing voice
Well done!
Leander -
I have not been reading anything of yours in a very long time, Oh my God, upon my return, joy overlaps into my heart. I can't believe you have written something for me so beautifully. It shows the undeniable passion that linger within your soul. I wish I had the better to express the joy that is in my heart. As you and I both know, the best thing in life can not be said or even heard, it must felt within. If you understand what I'm trying to say here, your voice echo through me. No one has made me that much happy. I thank God for sending you into my life. Thank you very much my sweet loving bird, wink
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A wonderful image, and the writing works well with the piece. I think there's a small error, it says t'was, and I think you ment it, and not just t...
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The content is rich..i don't believe that i possess the intellect to comprehend many other writers in my young age, but i truly appreciate this piece
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This is such a wonderful piece overflowing with imagery. Thanks so much for posting in my contest.
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it's a bit sad and evocative, really lovely, it sounds almost delicate to me. Wonderful.
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thats lovely! its beautiful, and very well writtin. good luck in my contest.
Suna Ketsuma -
This is a lovely poem, very well written with poetic sentiment and deep feelings.
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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Beautiful words to convey a deep sentiment. You are a talented poet!
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WOW
Very lovely piece & it carries a very deep lovely meaning
Thnx for sharing
GloriousGift
Heba
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this is a really beautiful poem that really shows the emotion that comes from loving someone os much and not being able to tell them.
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A ggreat poem that really shows your love and emotion for this person. really good take on the contest. well done and good luck in the contest
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This was so beautiful, a wonderful poem!
~Michaela~
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This is a great poem.
What was your inspiration for writng this?
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This is very beautiful!
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that was amazing! very good write! good luck in my contest! Happy b-lated valentine's day!
Suna Ketsuma -
Lovely song!
I liked the way you poured your heart into this write. Good luck in the contest.
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good
Appropriate for the VD season. You've captured something great, but I think it could use a little refifing.
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Beautiful poem that flows very nicely (i've should be I've)
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Beautiful
This is so beautiful. i love this. This is just...phenomonal -
Every well written. Good luck in the contest.
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so beautiful
that's really all i needed to say.
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Lovely Poem
Nicely done. A love searched for and waited on to share the song of hearts shared. One nit three line that weaken the read (line 17 - 19 and...if you leave me through- a cry I could not sing to you-consider delete) Lovely ending.
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no that line is the most beautiful line to me because it deepest it saying "if you should leave if your not with me it would be hard to explain how I feel without you because I don't know how I feel with you. It would cry that doesn't know why its crying a crying that falling without a reason but their is a reason
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this is very beautiful, and very soulful.its a great write, and a great valentines piece.
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This is Beautiful
very lovely words penned in this Valentine's piece.
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thank you
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