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Demons Dance



The demons danced

around my head
I slowly wept

and heard them jest.


You've now fallen,

your soul is ours
we shall torment you

within the dark.

 

I clasped my face

with both my hands

and then remembered

the devils plan.

 

For I had struck

one deal to many

now demons danced

around my telly.

 

I looked in the mirror

demons looked back

it's hard to go to heaven

and thats a fact... 

 

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  • Erozay
    January 26
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    i liked it its good


  • SchizoChic
    October 1, 2008

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    This is dark and dark poems always get me! I loved it. Best of luck to you in life and in this contest, poet.


  • Suicide Hotline
    March 25, 2008
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    Sure is! if haven was real. LOL thanks for the entery

  • know one
    March 5, 2008
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    great rhyme

    I loved the ending
    really good


  • Eon Blue
    February 19, 2008

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    You had me halfway through the poem, but somewhere near the middle it seemed to lose part of its consistency.
    Does it carry a whispering kind of tone or is it just me?

    Anyhow, this is the first thing I thought about when I read the title: http://youtube.com/watch?v=PuRz-TYJD9M


    • Timespell
      February 25, 2008
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      Yes... It was written with that sort of feeling to this piece. In the grips of madness would be a better description of this poem. A broken mind can only see what a broken mind wants.

      Thanks for reading and commenting on this piece.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • Charlotte Whispers
    February 14, 2008

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    Wowee

    I liked the light-ish tone of it and the title 'Demons Dance', you pretty much cannot get a cooler title line then that.

    • Timespell
      February 15, 2008
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      Thanks... "Demons Dance"

      To be honest with you, that was the first thing I notice about the picture supplied. Or was it just me looking a bit to far ahead?

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

  • Lady Dragonwyck
    February 14, 2008

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    Quite a Valentine....eh?

    Oh this is SUPERB!!! I so understand the "demons dance" and laugh and and and.....GREAT write. Good luck in the contest, my friend

    Lady D

    • Timespell
      February 15, 2008
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      Hehehe...

      I have had a few of them dance around my head, telling me things we should not no!

      All the best,

      ~T.S~


  • Lexie - gold member
    February 14, 2008
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    Ooooooo

    I love this,
    very well done indeed

    • Timespell
      February 15, 2008
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      Thanks for reading and commenting on this "Quicky Poem"
      and thanks for awarding it with the silver trophy.

      All the best,

      ~T.S~

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