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Constant Change

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Constant Change

Born in the mountains, where magic is born,
sinned with her freedom her motion has sinned.
Torn from the heavens such breezes are torn;
Wind is her name and they call her the Wind.

Aye! She has strength not seen with the eye;
soar gently she does, where eagles do soar.
I know of her speed; much faster than I;
ignore the fierce wind? You cannot ignore.

Just like a woman, she’s righteous and just.
Graceful, she moves like a waltz so graceful.
Adjust to her moods, you had better adjust.
Vulnerable you think; a lady is vulnerable?

Turn around and a woman will change in turn.
Learn from the wind and of women you'll learn.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Shadow Sonnet created by Amera M. Andersen may be written in any sonnet style. The Shadow takes place at the beginning and ending of each line as the words are identical or homophonic.
14 lines
9 or 10 syllables per line
Should have a volta or pivot
Iambic pentameter is not necessary

Form Source: Shadowpoetry.com

Art work by: x-horizon

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  • DesolatELifE
    July 18
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    Very nice.
    'ignore the fierce wind? You cannot ignore.' - wonderful line.


  • maa gold member
    March 13, 2008

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    just stopping by again to congratulate you for having presented this very revolutionary sonnet-form in this contest, which for sure has shattered many minds attached to classical sonnet-forms ... (including mine ) ...
    I love your inventiveness and sparkling creativity, please continue to delight us with the beauty of your poetry ...

    maa


  • wbiro gold member
    March 13, 2008

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    I'll bet that if you did not tell the reader the mechanics of the poem (shadow sonnet) there would have been no distractions, it would have 'sung' instead (as it does...)


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    March 12, 2008

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    Beautifully scripted and delightful. Well done to the form (as is to be expected) This is very modern day sonneting which I enjoy. Nice work. Good luck in the contest. ~Pamela


  • Lyndon gold member
    March 10, 2008

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    Clever. Effective. Contrived.

    These are perhaps my three immediate responses to this sonnet for sonnet it is. Cleverness comes in the construct. Not many here who could write as you have.
    Effective because, in the main, the word repetition in each line is telling. Contrived because the method does involve "bending over backwards in places" to achieve your trick. You are forced into syntactical reversals as in this line:
    "soar gently she does, where eagles do soar."
    Fundamentally, a fine Shakespearean sonnet.
    However your rhythm is a far cry from Shakespeare!
    You have four (not five) stresses to your decasyllabic lines. Choosing a line at random:
    "Just like a woman, she’s righteous and just." =>
    "JUST like a WOMan, she’s RIGHTeous and JUST."
    The metrical arrangement:
    Trochee (/x); Amphibrach (x/x); amphibrach; Iambus (x/)
    Great metrical vbariation.
    Perhaps the least satisfactory line:
    "Graceful, she moves like a waltz so graceful." Rather mundane.
    I must say that the vigour of this write comes from your variation in meter.
    Thank you for entering.
    Lyndon of the Winklings.

    You do come, by the couplet, to human nature.
    I keep thinking of a song, "They called the wind Mariah" or something like that.






  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    February 27, 2008

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    I think this is the first time i have seen this form. Excellent write Very well written I wish you the best with it niaish for sharing


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    February 23, 2008

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    WONDERFULLY SWEET

    You have given the mighty wind her wings...to know the wind, is to know a woman!...breath taking my Little Blue Star as always Niaish for entering and sharing that beautiful heart with me


  • penman gold member
    February 22, 2008
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    excellent

    Another fantastic creation from your great pen. Best of luck in the contest.


  • AbsoluteBrightness
    February 18, 2008

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    i love how these poems use the same word at the beginning and at the end, you think it would be the same but it can turn into something completly different. very well done.


  • And Hyetal
    February 18, 2008

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    Interesting creation Missus Anderson. I really like the idea of the same word at the beginning and the end. But what does homophonic mean?

    This poem was beautiful and I love how you gave the Wind a personality... I can somewhat hear her voice.

    You're a beautiful poet!

    ~Cassie


  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 16, 2008

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    These things are tough! But I said I would try, and your poem merits the highest compliment I can pay so here goes.

    The mountains of Man

    Steady and slow the mountains stand steady
    Change comes so slowly yet all of them change
    Ready to punish all climbers not ready
    Range of conditions across all the range

    Weakness not obvious, that is the weakness
    Look down on the world with high haughty look
    Bleakness of outlook is all of life bleakness
    Book full of views but ideas aren't the book

    Man like a mountain looks down on a man
    Grown from the child that is now fully grown
    Plan in his mind can he stick to the plan
    A tone in the wind calls him to atone

    Strong like a mountain but inside not strong
    Long is the time that for love he will long


  • MargaretG
    February 16, 2008
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    I like the metaphor, wind has mystery and power and so do women. The shadow sonnet has quite a lot of repetition, a bit much for me. You develop images with a good choice of wording. I like the couplet, it concludes very well. Good luck!


  • Emerald Dog
    February 16, 2008

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    Graceful, she moves like a waltz so graceful - is exactly what you've succeeded in doing here. This is certainly a dramatic sonnet form - and I doubt that a better first stanza could ever have been written. It bowled me over - thanks!


    • Amera gold member
      February 16, 2008
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      That's really a nice comment; thank you


  • Desire gold member
    February 15, 2008

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    Magnificent!!

    Wowzers Beautiful~
    You make the Sonnet enticing to pen...
    flows like the Victoria Falls~

    Fabulous~~
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Voice~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet One
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    February 15, 2008

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    Again you have astounded me. A beautiful sonnet with a twist and one that I may never master but you appear to manage with ease.....

    All the best in the contest....

    Love
    Sue


  • maa gold member
    February 15, 2008
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    a lovely message wrapped into an intriguing form ... very creative and revolutionary ... I am sure you will shatter the worlds of some of the classical sonneteers with your poetic invention ...

    wishing you the best in this contest,

    maa


  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 14, 2008
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    I haven't managed to get my head round this yet. The form not this example which is beautiul regardless of form. The reversal effect that the mirrored words give leads to a natural caesura which suits the flow of your words in my mind. The form also makes it harder to harder to have a soft start to the Volta you really just have to come out and sell it, which I thought worked very well here. Shall I have a go at a rhymed comment?
    I'll try it below.


  • moonbumps silver member
    February 14, 2008

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    Oh this is good and oh so unusual babe-really clever and so very intricate-am I envious????
    Greatest of luck with this one. xxx Hilly


  • PerVirtuous
    February 14, 2008

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    Beautiful and meaningful. You are getting the idea of many things all at once. I love it. I bow to you princess of sonntes.


  • Lexie - gold member
    February 14, 2008
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    wow

    this is captivating!!!
    ive never seen anything quite like it before,
    absolutly fantastic

  • Eusebius
    February 14, 2008

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    bravo

    Ah, this is so very fine, again! Lines 4 and lines 8 have exceptional potency and I absolutely loved them! bravo... bravo... bravo...


  • Faeryn
    February 14, 2008

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    I love this form you created, Amera. The repititon of words is so pretty. The first time I read it L10 seemed kind of akward but after reading it a few more times it fits. Probably just read it wrong the first time. Excellent sonnet. The first stanza is my favroite.


    -Tay


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 14, 2008
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    This is brilliant, I am in awe.

  • Papagallo
    February 14, 2008

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    Quite Interesting

    So you created this type of sonnet? I found it different and a little hard to read. I cannot understand a verse beginning and ending with the same word. Of course, I am a ver verse guy and I like the old world sonnet. I keep getting thrown by the end words beingbthe same as the beginning. Are the end words of one stanza suposed to lead into the next? I did like the poem, but the words threw me off the flow. Good luck and God bless. Opps! Good luck in the contest.


    • Amera gold member
      February 14, 2008
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      Not the entire poem is not in iambic pentameter parts must be read as an anapest that’s why you see more punctuation in the body of the piece than in most English sonnets. I find your comment an opportunity to teach. All poetry was originally meant to be sung or recited out loud. Remember to read all poetry out loud even your own and you will find that you enjoy it much more. If you want to know more about trochees and dactyls please send me an IM, I’ll be happy to help you. We are all learning here.


  • BellaD
    February 14, 2008

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    Beautiful sonnet!

    There you go again with another great poem to your credit. I like this form you have created. Best of luck in the contest.


  • StarEyes
    February 14, 2008

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    Another wonderful sonnet! How do you do it? I am always sooooooo amazed by the sonnets you do! You are soooooo good at them! How do you do it?

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    February 14, 2008

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    Oh the possibilites of this form! I think you have only touched on a few of them here, and yet you have produced a lovely poem.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    February 14, 2008

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    wow, this is a perfect poem for changes in many ways, the form shows creative minds working, good luck...\
    IN HIS CONTEST..
    mOONS

  • Bad Bill
    February 14, 2008
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    Intriguing sonnet form, this--the more I read, the more I like it!

    Bill

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