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Torn pages

 

 

 

If I stretch my fish net stockings
and wrap them [tightly] round my
reckless thoughts
would tragic hopes of you
ooze through diamond gaps
like decaying flesh?

Would it matter,
if the glossy epitaph
smeared across my gravestone,
neon, in an alter-world
of broken promises and heavy
aromatic drifts of
dying delusions of love,
never existed?

 

 

            And amongst fragmented screams,
            in just one lucid moment,
            I recall the fragrant flower of
            eternal love you gave to me,
            ~so beautiful~
            and true in it’s colour.


 

But blossoms,
especially blossoms
spiked with lies,
wilt easily under the pressure
of a hot house existence.

As shattered lives drift
like homeless raindrops
through a poisoned cloud,
the Seer sits in a corner,
and I lose myself  between
the torn pages of a surreal comedy
and flat-packed dreams
waiting to be ignited
by the night.

I recoil my tattered hopes
[emetics] and shove them
hard, down my throat,
and the Seer -
he just smiles
in silence.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Patpowers silver member
    June 21, 2008

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    Another great write here SaraJane

    Congratulations on being an honorable winner with this! You showed us how much talent you have. Lovely work again....THANKS!!


  • Razor-Blade Romance
    June 18, 2008
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    Whoa, this poem really sent a shiver down my spine and through my body, i think it is a fantastic, powerful poem demonstrating love, frustration, lust, passion, sexual thoughts and allowing the mind to concuct its own personal feeling about it.
    I think it is a marvolous piece !
    Well Done


  • Soft-Rain
    May 26, 2008

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    This was an amazing write. Your words were chose very purposeful the form is outstanding!
    I clung to every line.

    Lifetime


    • sarajaneUK
      May 26, 2008
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      Thank you for reading and commenting, very much appreciated. Ty sj


  • deercatcher
    May 10, 2008

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    What bee a DP? Dark Poetry?

    Reminds me of one of my lines-

    The corrosive cost of living next to me...


  • calmharm
    April 25, 2008

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    well done

    well done i am also new to this site so if you hae a minute commenting some of mine would be appreciated and would do the same for you


  • deanc444
    March 28, 2008
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    Very Accomplished

    Very well crafted, acerbic and added an interesting depth to that age-old story of betrayal


  • capricornpoet
    March 19, 2008

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    dark and brooding

    Poetic verve of darkness when love is cheated upon, flowing full of emotions and some dark wishing well,
    sadness coloured in loss and wanting to grasp meanings
    ,,while the Seer smiles in silence..deep and metaphoric..


    • sarajaneUK
      March 20, 2008
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      Thank you for the wonderful comment, very much appreciated, ty!! Janice


  • aboomer silver member
    March 9, 2008

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    WOW! I don't know what DP is, but I really like this! It's the first time I've seen one 'stretched out' and done like this, but I liked it. I love your wording and the depth to it....both great!
    Very well done!
    blessings
    jan


  • Patpowers silver member
    February 17, 2008
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    WOW! Good stuff here with this poem! Emotional and quite the read! THANKS!!

  • Onebyron silver member
    February 16, 2008

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    I found this poem intriguing, Janice, moody, dark and drawing one irresistably into its despairing depths. I have the feeling that it would matter a great deal.

  • Onebyron silver member
    February 16, 2008
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    Poignant


  • Nicotine Eyes
    February 14, 2008
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    This was very well puncuated for a first time. You did a nice job, Thanks and good luck.

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