He told her he was sorry
but +ha+ he had to leave
She wa+ched him grab his gun ((+h@ murder weap0n))
&& walk away
She sa+ +here sipping her cofFeE
miXed wi+h her +ears
++ xx ++
N0+hing was going righ+ anymore
bu+ she would not b
l
e
e
d
F()rceful
drops
She would
w
a
i
t
4 him
Hopeful of his return
Author notes
Forgive me if this is not what you are after. this is my 1st time writing in this style
A contest entry
- ♪ D.I.r.T.Y. P/r/e/t/t/y ♪ - C-o-N-t-e-S-T by Kari.
425 points, ended February 15, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round one (for everyone) prewrite contest ENTER ENTER ENTER (AND YES THAT MEAN'S YOU too by serenity silvermoon.
927 points, ended February 16, 2009, 1454 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please let me know what I can do better
Comments
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This is perfect. The only thing was the background was hard on the eyes, other then that I liked it a lot. Rock on.
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.. that's the whole point??? j/k... yeah; i think i'll change it. it's on my to-do list.
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