place no value on this ring...
it's worthless next to you.
if it'd been the signet of a king
with diamonds and other wondrous things
or from the hand of Emperor Ming...
it's worthless next to you.
Place no value on this stone...
it has no beauty like yours.
if it sparkled like a moonbeam shone
upon the shores of old Cologne,
your eyes would pale it to a bone...
it has no beauty like yours.
place no value on this band...
your smile has much more shine.
if it had come from Egypt's sand
or from ancient Samarkhand
it'd have no place upon your hand...
your smile has much more shine.
place no value on this key...
alas, i am too poor
to give you what you've given me
such riches there could never be
had Caesars gold been left to me...
alas, I'd be too poor.
place no value on my life...
to you, its freely given.
you have brought me from my strife
given meaning to my life.
will you be my loving wife,
and make my hell a heaven?...
to you, I'm freely given.
Author notes
Written November 22nd, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- love and romantic poems only by Cs282.
300 points, ended January 12, 2006, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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it was an instumental part from Nemo that somehow made me think of this old poem of mine
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what inspiration did you use?
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this was a good write. and very deep this is... and some opinion I see in here too, thanks for sharing this piece, keep up the awesome poetry.
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wow this is so beautiful i love it. it's deep. i really liked this. awesome job! you're very talented.
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Magnificent, Outstanding, You deserve a standing ovation for this one. It is beautiful! Good Job!!
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Sounds like the treasure trove from King Tuts tomb. A worthwhile deliver of acceptance and regally noticed by that someone special!
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I did. twice.
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u did not folow the rules i cant read it un till u fix it
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Very lovely and beautiful, I really like the comparisons and your creativity here. You have written this very well and with great feeling and thought. I really enjoyed reading this.
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You have quite a lyrical sound in your rhyming, it's smooth but beyond that it pulls the reader along with a charm.. there are none of those hitches so common to forced rhyme. I'm enjoying your style.. and the images you draw..
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This is very stunning. It reminds me of King Solomon and his love for the "comely woman" in the Bible. Solomon was a shrewd king ib battle, but he would take time to compliment the beauty of the butterfly. This is a poem that should capture any woman's heart. Eloquent! Brilliant indeed! Good Luck To You!
Much Love,
Renee
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Aww that's so sweet! Nicely done
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Samarkhand is a very old city in what is now Uzbekistan ( a former Soviet republic). its first contact with the western world was when it was conquered by Alexander the Great.
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I like the rhyming lpattern a lot. It was very origianal, a nice break from all the abab's i've been getting. The rhyming did seem a little forced at times though, and where in the world is Samarkhand? I really enjoyed the third stanza, that one didn't sound forced and it made a nice image. Thanks for entering.
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Just beautiful
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breath-taking
breath-takingly beautiful. i love this! wow! i'm glad you found someone who deserved it, because i'd hate for it to have gone to waist. what talent! awesome poem
Susie -
this was written as a wedding proposal. the woman who it was written for rejected it, but i have since found someone worthy
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exquisite...isn't love grand? I hope she realizes just how special she is ...
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that was awesome dude
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This is so beautiful, it's got lovely imagery and just really makes me feel so much of what you are saying.
This is so brilliant, it really deserved to get the trohpy, so well done.
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Wonderful job, so poetic so sweet. Your girl must be very happy of it. Congratulations with the contest also. Anna
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this is very very good hun..Out of all your works I have to say that this has to be one of your best.Really brought home the value of love..Keep up the good wrok..
(((HUGS)))
Katt..x -
Very nice love poem my friend. I liked how you incorporated your love of ancient Egypt into your write. Very unique, Very beautiful. Good job. Have fun. Steve
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Wow this is amazing, I love how you brought in history to be part of a poem. The flor of the poem was awesome and never seemed to break. Great write. Good luck in the contest.
Robin -
omg this is so amazing
i love it
it is so heartful and full of love and admiration
the imagery is so strong
the words so pure
it is astounding!
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Wonderful in its rhyme scheme,and beautifully descriptive. An awesome write. Good luck in the contest.
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Aah, I love the reptition and the words that you chose. They all work so well together to create this timeless masterpiece. Wonderful job. I bow down to your skill. Thank you for entering and good luck.
~Anastasia -
oh wow. i weep.
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riveting
this is love personified.the recepient of this devotion had damn well better deserve a love compared tothe most precious jewels from many lands.thanks for the journey and thanks for this riveting sentiment.good luck -
this is great! excellent job! very good write, i like it alot! good luck in the contest!
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I.t.: Amazing. I like this, a lot. Great job expressing everything about a ring and then your life. Nice. Great WORK!
Krissie: Same here. This is nicely written. Very deep. I like it. Good job.
I.t. and Krissie
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The way you find to rhyme things is really amazing. i like this alot.
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wow, this is very wonderful. Nice rhyming and flow, wonderful.
~Sydney -
Perfect
My favorite. It always manages to make me melt.
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