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The Lonely Hero




Born that pavement might move beneath my feet;
I recreate to follow destiny.
I - the eagle, the dove, the raven dies
straight for the setting sun the phoenix flies.


Would that I could be how you might love me;
how - I might, find buried depth beneath scars,
graceful string-strung-whispers of lonely call;
dark, stark echoes where tears and answers fall.

 

Down my spine, less youth's determination
for dead-end highways in gutters I’ve crawled:
risen only to regained fortitude,
trudging destiny to find latitude.

 

The multitudes forgot to understand,
the champion that begs to hold your hand.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

My first poem dealt with separation and choosing different destinies.

My second entry centered around creating reality from perception.

the collaboration was about reaching out to people.

My final piece deals with the struggles and perceptions of a misunderstood loner


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  • storiesuntold gold member
    November 22, 2008
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    Very well done

    This is a good piece of work with depth and the very reaching out for the love we all seak


  • klassy lassy
    August 8, 2008

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    Love this! Shimmering success!

    How can the multitudes understand
    destiny's destiny in just one hand?

    To yearn for sun as the phoenix flies
    gives rise to love's impassioned eyes

    Finds gentler world beneath his lashes
    where two doves wing above the ashes


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    April 8, 2008

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    Congratulations

    I am so pleased to see a trophy on this piece. You know how dear this beautifully written sonnet is to me. YAY!
    Well done! ~Pamela


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 8, 2008
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  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    April 8, 2008

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    This is very good.
    Is this a particular sonnet form? I have never heard of one were each line did not rhyme with another. That aside this reads very well and is surely a showcase of your talent.

    Best of luck in the contest.


    • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
      April 8, 2008
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      thank you mark, it is and I would need to go find its name as I have forgotten lol. I chose it more for the 10 syl. count: I needed more room for content.


  • HeavenScent4U
    April 8, 2008

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    Another well done sonnet. I have never written one but have read many but I had to ask some questions before judging the contest as I was sure I understood the structure and so-forth but I have to say this was well done. You have managed to incorporate all of your writes very well into this one, or at least expand further where you were going with the others. Thanks again for sharing your talent here. Thanks for entering and good luck. Be well and be blessed*rose*

     

    SCORE:

     

    Rules: 10
    Presentation: 10
    Spelling, grammar, and punctuation: 20
    Originality: 19
    How well you handled the prompt: 20
    Overall: 19

    Total: 98


    • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
      April 8, 2008
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      Thank you kindly for each and every round; this has been a challenging and most excellent contest! You both deserve applause.

  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    February 29, 2008
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    How I love this sonnet.


  • sunny day
    February 15, 2008

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    Bravo!!! Bravo!!! Bravo!!!

    With the passion and beauty of these words one can see inside your soul. All I can say is that it is a soul which should never be alone. It is born to be with one who can love as deeply as you do. The vivid imagery you afforded my mind's eye through your words of love went straight to my heart and absolutely blew me away. An amazing sonnet and I wish you all the best not only in the contest, more so with that someone who it is clear to see has touched your heart. Keep that ink flowing in all its grace and beauty. Love and God bless you always, in all ways. Joyce


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    February 15, 2008
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    I just had to come back for another read. I so love this sonnet. - Just beautiful. ~Pamela


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    February 14, 2008
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    Bravo! Standing in applause!

    Beautiful

    An amazing sonnet incorporating your three wonderful pieces.
    Excellent entry. ~Pamela

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