I died as I lived,
buried deep in some hole.
A contest entry
- 1 of 13 Challenges [Rounds, if you will]. by Naridill.
450 points, ended February 18, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest
Comments
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lol - yep, bundled in a ribbon box, ey? Something beautiful and uplifting to end with
Loved it.
Thanks for entering,
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lol, I love this one.
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lol...sorry, but this just cracked me up
love, lane
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I see your mind works like mine
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The poet pens a concise write with impact. Ten words to portray such hopelessness and dark thoughts.Neat. Honesty? my mind also rearranged this write as I am decaying as I lived, buried in some deep hole, decaying would intensify it and not lend itself to the allusion that the character may have died in a hole such as a mineshaft. Not a criticism whatsoever, it's nice to share a perspective, you know I am a rambler dear poet. Bravo.
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Wow, this poem just bowled me over. It feels like it literally hit me in the chest and caused me to lose my breath. To be able to have that reaction from two lines and 10 words is just outstanding. From these two lines I gain so much insight on the person, about how miserable s/he was and how hellish life was. This small snippet has more impact than a longer poem could, it's a misery so incredible that it defies description.
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My God you are brilliant....
Sigh~
Lynda
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he uncle evern with a short amount of words you make something fantastic and so simple brilliant. well done love you uncle
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