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Sunday, after noon

I am
A lazy man;
A wastrel with no plan,
I'm deflating time's balloon
And yawning 'neath the awning
This afternoon.

You will not find me walking the streets,
I'm staying warm between the sheets
On sundays,
After noon.

I am
A lazy man;
Half-baked uneaten flan,
The plate gone cold too soon.
Luxuriating, self-sedating,
This afternoon.

No, you will not find me making my bed,
You will find me in it instead
On sundays,
After noon.






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Can't be bothered.

It was all I could do to finish the damn thing.

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  • scentedrose
    March 6, 2008

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    tee hee

    Ok so it was all you could do to finish it. I think that it was cute and you won gold. So you most have done something right.

  • strangerforeigner
    February 23, 2008

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    This was great. Smooth flow, superb rhyme scheme. I'm loving the quality of entries I'm getting in this contest! Happy napping, friend!


  • quantumsurveyor
    February 22, 2008

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    A lyrical piece of penmanship that takes the atypical (typical) ennui of a Sunday afteroon and shows the prompt without spelling it out. I liked the balance, the rhythm and the internal rhyming. Well done in winning gold.


  • Peteskid gold member
    February 15, 2008
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    nice...humor is a welcomed stranger on AP...well done...PK

  • Zyskandar A Jaimot
    February 14, 2008

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    sunday sunday can't trust that day eh? flan should always be served at room-temperature liked the last stanza for its 'sardonic' humour personally 'dread' sundays can't 'do anything' on sunday thanks for sharing regards zaj


  • Devils Reject
    February 14, 2008

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    I like this. Makes me want to crawl back in bed now lol. Great write


  • Rose Patrick
    February 14, 2008

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    This was so cute i love it. i think that you wrote it very well indeed, at least to me anyway. i did so enjoy this read. i hope that you will have a great lazy day indeed

  • Virulent Malice
    February 14, 2008
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    Entertaining.


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    February 14, 2008
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    This is priceless. I love it!! Hope you win the gold!! Awesome.

  • quantumsurveyor
    February 14, 2008
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    This is a most appealing take on the prompt.


  • willcrook
    February 14, 2008
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    hehe Funny

    Lay-Z man x

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