Stings of a blazing summer sun
never touch me,
as I drown
within turquoise depths
of bountiful oceans
lighting your magical eyes;
scorching heat melts, to snowing breeze...
Icy tentacles
of stormy winter
never freeze me in their grip,
engulfed, as I stand,
in the burning passion
emanating, from your lips.
Author notes
51 words, 3 word title
A contest entry
- Semi Quickie And Possible publishing. by creationsfromheart.
650 points, ended March 12, 2008, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Invite only From the 50-55 amazing words contest by creationsfromheart.
415 points, ended March 13, 2008, 16 entries
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aw thank you this is great
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Thank you for the kind comment and applause Glad you enjoyed it...
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ah... sweet love - we are slaves to its whims, perhaps now i will walk away and start screaming then again maybe not, i will just shuffle life as ever, a good poem.
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Thanks a lot for the kind comment and applause, glad you enjoyed the poem..
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very best
seasonless love surmounts all odds.
your verse worded in nice terms cathes all hearts and souls for its beauty and decorum in decent style
very best,always
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Thank you so much for the kind comment, glad you liked the poem...
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Stunned
I really don't know what to say this has written something I have always thought of but could never put to words... Amazing poetry seriously... I need to take notes from your poems to make mine better... Good luck in the contest and with a poem like this how can you lose? lol
Dr. Boris Kingsworth
PHD Boreology
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Thank you so much for the kind comment... Glad you liked it
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I know it is rather hard to do these with in so few words, in the first stanza if you read it out loud the beside and because are tongue twisters and seems a word is missing in this. I love the idea of the poem and think it would be wonderful if you could work with this first stanza, I will be reading all entries again Good luck in the contest and thank you for joining in
never burn me
when you are beside,
because there are always
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Thank you for the kind comment and suggestion. I have reworked the first stanza.
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