somewhere,
in reverie
between nod, sweep, ebb, pluck,
your fingers caressing heartstrings,
i cry
someplace,
anywhere else
you counterbalance each
note with heartsongs and softer sighs
I breathe...
Author notes
just playing with cinquain again after a lull...
In a list
A contest entry
- finger music: strings by Nicolette.
1050 points, ended February 25, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I cry when I hear violins and bagpipes and sometimes the pipe organ if I am in a church.
I never wrote a cinquain. Well I don't think.
It's Spring. How are you?
Lisa
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thanks Lisa
Cinquains are the ONLY form poetry i ever 'do'
i once tried to write tanka - i even joined a class here and graduated with an grade A but i never understood why tanka are tanka or haiku are haiku really - i get lost in technicality.
with cinquain as long as it's a good day and i can count eight sylables I have it cracked. I rarely write one because i can rarely count to eight coherently and as i come from yorkshire we talk funny anyway so i get told i have counted wrong! can't win!
on reflection i have never understood the why of most things lol!
spring is late
it has snowed and is frosty
bloody global warming indeed - it's freezing!
hope you are well
elaine
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It has been the same here -- cold. Today it was 61 F degrees though. People have gone Mad. It was crazy. Cars everywhere and I even dragged myself to the beach for lunch.
Yes, I'm good. Despite the slowness of Spring.
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gorgeous
well nicolette prompts delicate poetry,this one surely whispers a whiff of gentle freshness to me , lovely write,tender and heart warming!
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this is gorgeous...isn't that the way with music...it really affects our emotions...mm...yes, and lovers do this too..very beautiful cinquains....
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This is how a cinquain should be written and I am SO happy to see you playing with it again, Elaine! Beautiful poetry with such a haunting quality about it...somewhere between the cry and the breath.
this line "you counterbalance each note" brings it all together for me - simply beautiful, meaningful poetry - life music.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
~ Nicolette
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Ooooh, beautiful! And I have an entry in this contest too, darn it! LOL!
"you counterbalance each
note"
Awww, I will match you sigh for sigh. That is my favorite part - makes me hopeful, for having someone there who is the ying to your yang. Makes me think of see-saws, balance and equality in love. There is nothing more amazing than having someone who feels the same way about you as you do about them.
Lovelyyyyyyy
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thank you
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i wouldn't know a cinquain from an airplane, but i do know what beautiful poetry looks like, and this is a true example.
the poignancy of this piece slid right under my skin, and reminded me of how lucky i am
thanks for creating this for us
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...and thank you for such a lovely comment
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That is so beautiful!!!
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simply ... beautiful, could feel every finger stroke and tipped words.... lovely lovely lovely
Gilly. xoxooxoxox
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Oh, dearest poetess, how beautifully you play the cello, I heard every note, simply wonderful,wonderful! Bravo-licious.
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I love heartsongs
This is beautiful, really nice work with the prompt. I've always liked cello music..really does pull at the heart, doesn't it?
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Beautifully penned, Poet. Nic is the very one who got me started writing cinquains. She will enjoy this one, I know. Good luck in the contest. Wanda
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"somewhere,
in reverie
between nod, sweep, ebb, pluck"
wow!! that's just plain beautiful! amazing cinquains here...
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