Deep within the forest of my soul,
Wherein vines stretch far and owls sing
Hymns unto nocturnal death;
Where blue flowers reflect
The moon’s white light;
And where a rivulet curves round
A single oak upon a grassy promontory--
There resides your lovely form,
Humming the Ode to Eternal Love
I composed for you.
Your clear green eyes
Illumine the dark verdure surrounding.
Your precious and melodious voice
Flows through the vegetal and lacustrine valleys,
Rising, at last, towards the starry welkin,
Where the silver clouds breathe in its sweetness
And cover the ground with rain.
Surely, my Love, from this ablution will grow
An orchard of yellow orchids.
Surely, mon belle de nuit— my beauty of the night,
Will arise the aureate sun of day, our Child.
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF: Prewrites Contest for My Favorites by Night Hope.
900 points, ended June 13, 2008, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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how enchantingly charm and captivatinly beautiful. i do so well like your diction and the tone and style are grand. nicely penned. peace
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Absolutely gorgeous work. Breathtaking, rich with imagery. You have an amazing vocabulary. Really, I could read it over and over again and never tire of it. Blessings. Debby
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"Your clear green eyes
Illumine the dark verdure surrounding.
Your precious and melodious voice
Flows through the vegetal and lacustrine valleys,
Rising, at last, towards the starry welkin,
Where the silver clouds breathe in its sweetness
And cover the ground with rain."
You have always been one of the finest & most original of my favorite younger writers, dear Scribe. Within this quoted stanza alone is a wealth of wisdom, let alone unique language, fragrant & ripe with flavor. You pen such iridescent poetry, reflecting & refracting such beautiful colors. I hope you know how much I've always enjoyed your work...& how much I hope to continue enjoying it, long into my golden years. 
Incredibly done, my Friend. Thank you for entering my contest. Good luck, Sweetie. 
Wanda
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What is there to say to such a beautiful piece..
I do not believe there are any words on this earth that could do justice to this beautifully written poem..
Your words flow so well.. If they were spoken aloud I am sure that they would be whispered for the beauty of the flow in your words seems so soft..
Such a beautiful write..
Peace to you, Jetleena
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what? have you gone mad? are you here to put shadows and shame on our futile attempts at descriptions with this marvelous poem? i think so...thank you for submitting this for everyone to read and enjoy
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I have never read of the laying of dew on the grass expressed so eloquantly as this superb writing and imagary.
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Brilliant! This flows with so much love you can almost feel it, absolutely awesome.
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Outstanding
You have so much lyrical ability - your poetry continues to impress me. I loved the last stanza and the dense, well-crafted imagery that flows throughout this poem. This is a well-written, articulate poem that speaks of love with a vivid warmth and sense of passion. I thought it was fantastic.
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Wow, this is exquisite! What a lovely romantic soul you have..and the girl is lucky to have you..best wishes, and Happy Valentine's Day, friend.
Jin
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