Look closer tell me, I was wrong!
Tell me how, this victim deceived you?
My eye's cried suffering tears
for many years, they looked beyond your faults.
You tried to knock me down!
The waves of mood swings
crashing upon, my already broken spirit.
Now from far away, I look at you,
eyes saying no more fear.
Search the look, on my peaceful face.
I have said, my goodbyes!
This ocean is calm now,
one last glance...
To the demons of yesterday
my time has come.
I place you in the past.
Author notes
Goodbye to the past, hello to a loving future.
Picture Credit::-
SamuraiChopstick@deviantart
A contest entry
- The crazy picture prompt points give-a-way! by volcaniclastic.
2000 points, ended March 2, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Fork in the Road by Dutch Doll.
595 points, ended February 28, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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Always proud of you
Rick -
We all have to say goodbye to past sorrows...if we ever want a wonderful future. Seems you are well on your way!
Blessed be~
Sue
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Please credit the artist if you post an image in your poem.
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Sulfane, sorry i forgot and the beautiful artwork is credited now. Thanks
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I place you in the past
With that you end it and it stays ended wonderfull line wonderfull poem
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Wow, I really enjoyed the whole poem but the ending was very inspirational. So honest. I enjoy the imagry of the calm ocean, kind of a sigh of relief,
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Thank You Heart Bleeds!
WOW! Thanks so much for the bronze and for such a great prompt to work with. I seen my past gone in it and you gave me the chance to express this!
Much appreciated hun!
Hugs
~Lisa~
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Excellent
This ocean is calm now,
one last glance...
To the demons of yesterday
my time has come.
I place you in the past.
Great expression of your feelings in verse
You did well to make these words
You have said your goodbyes
Rick
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Love the raw emotion expressed in this. The last line is powerful. Hope you do well in the contest.
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Just cause the door is closed does not mean the memories are gone. Just cause you have grown and moved on doesn't mean you don't bear the scars of your travail to reach where you are now. But, you are less for none of it, only more.
You are right, it is all past. You have moved on. This is truly a song of freedom and I, for one, look forward to the language of your flight. Soar
Love, Tom B.
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Tom B
I am gonna soar! Freedom yes does leave some scars but they have healed, Time for flight of those wings!
Love
~Lisa~
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