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It's in the Heart of the Matter

 

 

Dark shades of night now mask my eyes, and lead me to this place,

Where once I came in sorrows grasp, with he who would erase

The emptiness that swallowed me, that set me far apart ;

Could he who held my ice cold hand help heal my broken heart?

And why this place of barren trees, of moss and crumpled leaves,

E’en though it be his Lunar Edge, my mind could not perceive

How water, rock, and sightless sounds could bring a soul to life,

A soul clutched tight in doubt’s cruel hand, o’erwhelmed by rampant strife.

His voice is gentle as he speaks, vague sounds of heartfelt words,

I feel so distant and removed, and yet I’m somehow stirred.

The words that slip in through my ears are won’drous, yet absurd.

For they are words from deep within, like none I’ve ever heard.

"You’re the first and only one I’ve ever brought out here,

And if I have my way of ways, please let me make it clear,

Not only first, but also last, the one and only one,

I pray that we will always be, what we’ve tonight begun.

For you are all I’ll ever want, a dream that’s come alive,

That first day that I met you there, I knew I’d not survive

Without those sky-blue eyes of yours, and pure angelic face,

That makes me feel alive once more and makes my rapt heart race."

Not only his heart races now, for mine is touched and moved.

And in the chill and darkness there this won’drous man has proved

That what my heart of hearts has KNOWN can now be free at last,

And what once was is now no more – it’s buried in the past.

So standing on this high up place beneath the moon’s bright glow,

And staring at adoring eyes that seem to clearly know,

Despite the doubt and pain I hold as two lives un-entwine,

That I’m the one to be his own, as surely as he’s mine.

Now here amidst the rocks and trees and water’s glist’ning jewels,

We stand and hug and drink it in, ignoring all those fools

Who loved and lost us in the past, and often did mislead,

But led us to each other now, as heaven has decreed.



 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    February 15, 2008

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    As always your writing truly astounds and this is no exception. 'Tis beautiful and amazing
    Congratulations on the well deserved gold
    Gaylene


  • Gatlianne
    February 15, 2008
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    uuuhhhhmazing

    you two are quite a team


  • Veronica Leigh
    February 15, 2008

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    This is amazing. The writing, the painting, the story... it's all so like something from out of a movie. I'm in awe and have nothing of any worth to say about this other than it's all so very beautiful.

    y'all are amazing!

    I love you GP!


  • Manoj Sanyal
    February 15, 2008
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    lovely poem indeed
    Thanks for your participation
    Best wishes and good luck,


  • Dienush
    February 14, 2008

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    Okay, so I'm speechless. Let me *try* to get my power of speech back.

    Alright. So this is an amazing collaboration. The painting is very nice and I like the colors and that thing you have written about is an amazing life experience, so it seems to me.
    But the poem is just so touching. Makes me cry, really. It sounds as if it were written by one person. It keeps the same style smoothly and flowing well throughout the whole piece. And the subject... it's really moving to see someone cares about another person enough to write such a poem with them, on something that matters to the other person even though they may or may not relate. The imagery here is vivid and depicts what happened quite well. And I am simply astounded by what a great piece of teamwork this is.


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    February 14, 2008
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    Very touching, beautiful I must say. Poetry with a heart, I loved your wonderful words.

  • SueRee
    February 14, 2008

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    Very Good

    You show us your loss and despair, then lead us past that to a new beginning. The last verse is a great summary, especially "ignoring the fools who loved and lost us in the past". Easier said than done, but such a wonderful new beginning certainly helps! Very good write!

  • Virulent Malice
    February 14, 2008
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    The green font is a bit hard to read for the notes section. Other than that I thought the poem had some good descriptives, was pretty good overall. The title reminds me of lyrics "The heart of the matter, it's the heart that matters more." Good work.

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    February 14, 2008

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    It is amazing that something so beautiful can be created by two different hearts with two different feelings, nicely done, with pristine imagery and easy flow... very eye catching too, goodluck in this contest

    Karen


  • HopelessScribbles gold member
    February 14, 2008

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    You in all did a beautiful,sad and inspiring piece here, to colab with someone and yet pull it together,Bravo for you! imingery is so cool! thanks for sharing it with us...
    Moons


  • Darianna
    February 14, 2008

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    Awwww you both had me on verge of crying!!! I'm so glad to have read this today of all days!! You are both soooo stupidly special to me! You make an awesome team with these writes and art combined. Ishypoo, your paintings leave me in awe! Photo like, I've not seen anything like it since the masters of old! Daddy, your words just spring off the page and wrap themselves around the readers heart. Love reading your words. I'm a huge fan!

    LOVE LOVE LOVE YOU BOTH!!!!

    Dari DooDOoDoo XXXX


  • Ishtar
    February 14, 2008

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    Like I said, this is the most amazing thing anyone has ever written.
    Made me want to squuuuuueeeeeze his face out -and yours, too, for being such an awesome writer! Love ya, grampish. <3

    -Reni

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