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Wicked Lovely

Horrible and beautiful and completely terrifying
That's what you say
That's what you call me
Careful now,
You don't want to fall in love with me
Because I will only tear your heart out
And not be sorry for it at all
Since I'm only helping you avoid dissapointment
In the long run


I will try to kill you
If you try to save me

Author notes

If he tries to get closer, I'll end up dragging him down with me.

A contest entry

Go ahead, feel free to kick my butt with critism.

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  • bananasfoster42
    June 18, 2008
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    great poem, thanks for the entry!


  • whits end silver member
    April 29, 2008
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    WOW!!!

    This was totally cool and honest. Short and bittersweet!! Great job!


  • Blooming Poet
    March 24, 2008
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    The pain displayed here is so intense. Officially warning here. you seem to be very bitter in relation to love. no offence. I like this part:
    You don't want to fall in love with me
    Because I will only tear your heart out
    And not be sorry for it at all
    Since I'm only helping you avoid dissapointment
    In the long run


  • Selene Tremere
    March 12, 2008

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    I can relate to those words...there was someone,once who told me almost the same thing...and I did not listen so sad.that can change somebody's life ...
    great job!
    Thanks for entering the contest ^^


  • girl shaman
    February 18, 2008

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    well the topic on this is very unique; although i know many have felt that they shouldnt love someone for fear of hurting them in some awful way.
    now when it comes to straight forward emotions in poems i was glad you didn't rhyme or try to cash in on a cliche remark. i really dont have any suggestions other then maybe look into some vocabulary for the words 'beautiful' and horrible, also try and keep to one or two adjectives in an opening line.
    thank you for entering


  • La Tua Cantante
    February 14, 2008

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    I adore this one. It'd so wickedly true. My favorite part is:
    "Careful now,
    You don't want to fall in love with me
    Because I will only tear your heart out"
    Beautiful choice of words.


  • Whyitt U
    February 14, 2008
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    Wickedly lovely indeed. Loved the last two lines, nice take on it.

    Wyatt xxx

  • Jude Ashdown
    February 14, 2008
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    It sounds like you had fun writing this. Well done I liked it.

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