Wondering about this (life)
/Trying\ to figure it out
There has to be (something)
And yet there is (nothing)
I look around to \see/
All I find is this (darkness)
A darkeness that |never| seems to end
Like /space/?
\No\, not space
Like the /night/?
\No\, not like the night
||Emptier||
(Much), much emptier
And, yet, so /full\
Brimming with \doubt\
Overflowing with /pain/
And yet (Empty)
As \hollow/ as a tree
/Blacker\ than my soul
And still beckoning |me|
Calling to |me|
Like an open, empty, waiting \grave/
HCII
Author notes
I tried to express to the reader the dark thoughts of an individual depressed or feeling a strong lack of hope. Hopelessness is a powerful force in the lives of humans and can be devastating in its impact.
A contest entry
- Life. by Puking Faerie Dust.
1275 points, ended March 12, 2008, 20 entries
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Did this poem give the reader a good look into the mind of the author?
Comments
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I really, really enjoyed this. It's very dark, and that's primarily what I like to read. I don't understand the use of the excess punctuation, but it's a wonderful and deep poem, none-the-less. Great descriptions and imagery, with the right amount of emotion.
Thank you for entering, and good luck.
Jeanette*~ -
This is another fantastic poem with or without the caps in it. I really liked the lines, especially the ending of the poem. It's really cool, and you did a great job of expression in it. Good luck to you in the contest and keep up the amazing writes. Oh and so you know, there is one mispelled word in it. the line with the word 'something' in it, you forgot the E. I just figured I'd point that out to you.
much love always
~~Victoria~~
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