I feel the darkness
It's all around
I sit and cry
But make no sound
All the thoughts
That flood my brain
Are dark and cold
Like midnight rain
Building pressure
In my mind
All my thoughts
Begin to bind
I feel my world
Begin to break
All this turmoil
I cannot take
I am pushed
Towards the edge
And fall away
From this ledge
I cannot show
This pain I feel
With this mask
I will conceal
You will never
See my pain
This angel's face
This perfect chain
Go on living
I go through hell
This toture's mine
I'll never tell
Author notes
Angel
Mask
Dark
Edge
Break
With the venomous kiss you gave me... I'm killing loneliness
Comments
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If this poem doesn't show raw emotion I don't know what does =] I loved his poem it's amazingly good! My favorite lines in here and I must say it is nicely writting are the lines "I cannot show// This pain I feel//With this mask// I will conceal" and the other lines are "Go on living//I go through hell// This toture's mine//I'll never tell" Those lines are just great. You did a good job on this poem and a wonderful job using those words. It flows so good and you can actually see what you talking about. Wat is felt is probally something no one will understand but the writer but this poem has a great depth to it. Great Job!
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Oooo! HIM...a good muse.
This flows so nicely! Very good. -
this sounds like lyrics... the way it flows would work amazingly for a song. i really enjoyed this write. but i have a suggestion where it says can't, cannot makes it flow better.
You will never
See my pain
This angel's face
This perfect chain
Go on living
I go through hell
This toture's mine
I'll never tell
this part is really good
you did amazing with the workd bank. thank you so much for entering. -
ok your prompt is a word bank
Angel
Mask
Dark
Edge
Break
you can change the endings ex. die - dying
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