Oh God
you must be an apprentice for
calligraphy on a profit and loss register
eliminating the vocabularies
being not pleased
enduring us a life between the duration
while you were transcribing and canceling
your synonym finders
Oh God...
Author notes
According to the theory of the Karma which means that we are responsible for the acts of ours in this birth, God is a power to look into the details of our karma while deciding our next birth as a different person with different duties to perform on this Earth. And this cycle Goes on constantly. We are given a destiny time and again as a result of our acts.
In a list
A contest entry
- Love is a big illusion and Life is a smart confusion by Purush.
550 points, ended February 27, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is very nice ...
but I am nonplussed over this line:
enduring us a life between the duration
as I am not sure what it means. It's not English, although the words are English. I suspect it means something like:
"granting us a life within parameters", but am not really sure.
The first stanza is pure genius. Absolute genius.
All in all, this is a rare little gem of a poem. I'm glad I thought to stop by and take a look today.
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Thank you for your read and kind words..you are quite right while defining the meaning of the poem..at the same time I have added the authores note to make my concept more clear. Thanks again for commenting on my work.
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this is another of your deep thought out poems
and the use of words
is a great subject and of course the beging subject
excellent my friend
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Maybe it's just me, but this conjures an image of God writing all our good (and not so good?) deeds in the book of life. I confess I don't understand the phrase "synonym finders" which must be very significant as it is also the title.
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wow...this is such a powerful piece with interesing metaphors and intriguing images...thank you for sharing this lovely write...
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I liked this poem. A bit strange, but okay.
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Many congratulations on the silver here...Peace, Rhonda
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Great job. I really enjoyed this.
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Not sure I understand all the play on words and metaphors. Interesting write none-the-less. Makes one think. Not sure what it had to do with the "Light of the World." but I just may be missing the point.
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realistic meaning for relationships
a person who might have read a verse for pure language
this makes me think over the way I was at the mirror and wanted to touch my hair at the view how a baby does when breastfeeding and shouldn't that be our first reflection, and then continued in that we're living to share. words are not for inventions that are for never mind when an age comes around, but honestly not junk in consideration of granpa or infant of what topic to raise --
so there would be the humility of not just scribbling cool by "calligraphy on a profit and loss register" as there's direction in order when continuity can be understood, and sometimes that appears smeared and so then a mouth but that's not necessary ultimately listening and all.
similarity is only towards another smile as we express through awareness of "eliminating the vocabularies
being not pleased" with favor for audience of awe, not avocation only.
mindfulness beautiful and,
babies are my subject
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INTERESTING PLAY ON WORDS, AND I AM SURE WE ARE KEEPING GOD VERY BUSY GOD BLESS
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Wonderful!
'enduring us a life between the duration'
This morning I was wondering what God thinks of his own creation and then I read that another galaxy has been discovered that is over 11 billion years old.
I decided to surrender and try not to think at all.
Happy Valentine's Day dear PDK! God Bless You! Jane
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I've never really thought of God as an accountant before. Keeping track of the credits and debits..I usually reserve that quality to we humans. But you give me something to consider with this write..And the image you placed with the words I find distracting, in a good way...Peace and best of luck in the contest. Rhonda
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The words are simple and deep...hmm im left contemplating, thankyou for that...
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best of luck
THE ILLUSTRATION first attracted me very well
the verse is neat and carefully worded
best of luck in the contest
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