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Music’s decrescendo
tumbles down

mountain’s slanted face
then rises up again
in gentle strokes,
granting tender lilt
      to lavender and longing.

Though it is just sound,

my soul could chase its haunting bliss,
and grasp                   
at every nearly-animate strain

to feel rhythms
slip through fingers
and barely wisp at skin,
arousing ardent lips;

But, instead,

I remain here
in these foothills

head upon a rock,
face and smile softly upturned,
listening to its distant
beauty,

And resting--

having known
the deeper kiss
of sufficient grace.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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PROMPT:
"Music, sweet music
I wish I could caress
and kiss, kiss"

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  • Flowergirl
    August 31
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    great write i loved it keep writting...

  • Lj-
    July 15

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    I really like this.
    Favorite lines:
    "granting tender lilt
    to lavender and longing."

    Great write.


  • Faithbound gold member
    March 5

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    Oh I love this. The ending was just perfect. Your flow was soft and lovely. Sufficient grace is something we far too often take for granted. I am happy to have found this today. Later I will be checking out more of your work. Truly this was beautiful.
  • Kalamina
    March 2

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    You captured a lot in this poem, i thoroughly enjoyed it, it made me miss home so much! The mountains are so beautiful, and yes, it brings a peace to be in the midst of them.


  • CitrineSunrise
    March 2
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    This is so lovely. I am pleased your work was featured because I think everyone needs to hear your beautiful voice. You never obscure your meaning with unnecessary verbiage. Each phrase is perfectly placed to guide the reader and let your music sing. Congratulations on your trophies. Very nicely written. Peace, Liz


  • TaraKM silver member
    March 2
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    Beautiful

    Lovely writing, the words simply flow from line to line. I found the most impressing part of this poem to be the curious and spectacular use of vocabulary. I'm not sure if a theasarus was used here, but it doesn't matter, as the writing is good! Great job.


  • paulcreates silver member
    March 2

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    Wow ttc this is beautiful. We here in Colorado enjoy several vistas such as this and you have captured them all in this writing. Very well done.
    Paul

  • Michael P
    March 2

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    beautiful Ten I really felt your contented ease at the end of this, like a very spiritual love happy to have known and satisfied to watch the love contained in elsewheres-beautiful.


  • cherche -d -ame gold member
    March 2

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    to comment on such beauty would only take away from it, so I will simply say "thank you for sharing your talent"
    reenie


  • nilav
    March 1

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    the picture is an eye-feast and the poem is a feast for the mind....to the lavender and longing...lovely..

  • scentedrose
    March 1

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    Beautiful

    I love this poem. It is a beauty. I really Enjoyed the craft of your write,
    mild improvement needed but barely.
    Great job.


  • DogFish silver member
    March 1
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    Really made me want to be there!


  • Rashae
    March 1
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    Beautifully written!

  • wakingdevil
    February 29

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    Such a beautiful piece filled with emotions and a sweet flow.The phrasings were wonderfully done and lent a gentle lull to the write.Well done and deserving of the trophies it recieved


  • Tangled Angle
    February 29
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    Congratulations for placing 3rd out of 100 entries.


  • Tangled Angle
    February 26
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    Beautiful.

  • Peteskid gold member
    February 24

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    something that makes such glorious sights and feelings fade even a bit may well be described as grace... a lovely writing here, wonderful depth and imagery...PK


  • Everwind Rising
    February 24

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    Absolutely beautiful. Your word choices are perfect and lend such a lyrical quality to this piece. I love the way you move from an earthly image to a heavenly truth and use music here as your intermidiary

  • Cupcrazy gold member
    February 23

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    very beautiful piece, lovely expression and imagery. I loved the mountains slanted face and the deeper kiss of sufficient grace as well as the decrescendo, just wonderful phrasing. Hugs, Bunny

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