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The dawning night

 

 

As the day slides into a dusky

fusion of sunset and moonlight,

my sprawling mind

is flecked with thoughts

of you.

 

But in the dawning night,

you flood even the

spaces of my synapses,

and thoughts

are no longer my own.

 

I yearn to rest a while,

gather myself and

find an inner peace,

where a requited love

would rest gently

on an easy soul,

but each platelet

rushing my veins

whispers your name,

hounding my dreams.

 

You are everywhere,

pulsating through my body,

touching every

moment of me,

and there is nothing

I can do now,

but love you. 

 

 

 

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    October 5, 2008

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    Ah..this is what the love is..a piece which brings the eternal layers into the mindset of the lover..you shared a very personal joy here with your wonderful penning..well done..


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    October 2, 2008
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    im passioned writing , i will read more of your work


  • DarkHunter
    May 30, 2008
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    wow. don't know what else to say. beautiful vivid descriptions.


    • sarajaneUK
      May 30, 2008
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      Thank you for reading and commenting, glad you enjoyed. Thank you sj


  • deercatcher
    May 16, 2008

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    Well rats. I would have thought old Prabhu would have cha-chinged this! It hurts, though. Obsessive. Been there. I harrassed Prabhu, commenting on all his poems about how he had punished the monkeys that ate the mangos on his tree. ("I saw what you did to the monkeys, Prabhu...") He eventually banned me. Some times humor doesn't cross culture very well...


    (Maybe he really did do the monkeys...)


  • individuality gold member
    March 29, 2008

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    a good piece of poetry - love shines for us, in us, around us. a smooth flow as i was reading, good imagery

  • Uriah Hamilton
    February 14, 2008
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    Lovely

    Desire and poetic obsession, truly fitting for a poet.

  • Bad Bill
    February 14, 2008

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    A beautifully-worded and intelligent piece of sensual poetry which really describes the ache of love. Excellent poem.

    Bill

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