And so I depart.
These words my final goodbye.
"Never again, will you watch me sleep,
now it is I who watches over you...
Until we meet again."
Author notes
In honor of Valentine's Day, I went a little sappy. Last words to a lover. Basically saying, now it's my turn to watch over you. (From heaven.) Hope you enjoyed my strangeness.
A contest entry
- 1 of 13 Challenges [Rounds, if you will]. by Naridill.
450 points, ended February 18, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comment honestly please. But don't be rude. CONSTRUCTIVE CRISTISM is welcome. But don't bash me; I work hard.
Comments
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Beautiful and sought well. Very emotional and tamed but still a happy lament to soften the blow. Something gripping and nicely worded.
Thanks for entering,
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Hi i like your poem its kinda nice to see a final goodbye that is sappy rather than full of anger or hurt, and i get the feeling of peacefullness from this rather than some goodbyes which are from suicides that even though are touching are more forced. I definately get this feeling of serenity with this. well done.
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Thank you. I tried. I had a really good picture in my head about what it would be like. It was just a matter of getting the words right. Glad to know I did well. ^.^
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