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Beneath green leaf

Down beneath green leaf and moss,
Unfazed by resting hand on cloth,
Pale movement pooled in patient eyes
Stirs ancient wisdom, in the wise
Untutored flame to draw the moth.

So here, in lichen-friendly hollow,
The velvet capped and coated, follow
Open-wheeled in lightest brown,
To seal the oily chequered mound
In weightlessness of empty borrow.

Down beneath cathedral firs,
In gathered dusk the dark defers
To silence cracked by fingers, steamed
Unwhistling breath to thread the seams
Re-stitched by spirits' subtle spur.






Author notes

I took 'nature' as the prompt, weaving in the mysterious spirituality I find in natural woodland. Like a film half-glimpsed in a wooded hollow, lowlit and smudged but very real...I hope.

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  • Tuhar
    February 17, 2008

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    sounds a bit like mine

    nice one animarising you really painted a picture. I wish I could write like that. It made me think if forests are that glorious why are we destroying them?


    • Animarising
      February 17, 2008
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      Good question my friend, there is something ancient and magical about the woodland.


  • Manoj Sanyal
    February 15, 2008
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    Thought provoking and well expressed.
    Thanks for your participation.
    Best wishes and good luck,


  • Devils Reject
    February 14, 2008

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    You owned this piece. Great job of painting a vivid mental picture here. Good luck in the contest.


  • Billythekid
    February 14, 2008

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    This is very real indeed, I too find my solice in the woodlands. This has a magical feel to it and makes me long for summertime. I love the ryhme scheme you used.

  • Zyskandar A Jaimot
    February 14, 2008

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    interesting the juxtaposition of 'cathedral firs'and 'spirits' wisdom rising from ancient moss while "Untutored flame to draw the moth." very enetertaining write thanks for sharing regards zaj

  • SueRee
    February 14, 2008

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    Tranquil

    I want to find the tiny spirits that can travel in these green spaces. Thanks for the invitation to slow down and watch the subtlties of nature!

  • Virulent Malice
    February 14, 2008

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    Wonderful, just wonderful. This is the kinda poetry I seek out on this website. It holds content, meaning, imagery and flow. Very few of us command poetry, many attempt it, you command it. Bravo.

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    February 14, 2008

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    This is just so soft and beautiful, such a glorious natural piece and flow... well done, goodluck in this contest

    Karen


  • quantumsurveyor
    February 14, 2008

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    The words....weightlessness of empty borrow...have a subtle resonance that reminds of the ancient burial rites of our forefathers. Darkly beautiful.


  • Nature Song silver member
    February 13, 2008

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    Beneanth the furrows of a green leaf...covered in the forests edge. One can invision the sight and senses take hold here with the words from your poem. Very well captured! Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem. Good luck in your contest ~Sie


  • Tarja
    February 13, 2008

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    This had a very interesting rhyme scheme that I am unfamiliar with but I enjoyed it. The imagery in this was brutal as well... overall this was fantastic. Well done and good luck in the contest.

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