I bring you to life, through my thoughts
I see you everywhere,
I feel your presence in my soul
you take away my fear.
You follow me and guide my path
I stumble you are there;
you whisper deep within my soul
secrets that we share.
I see your presence in the earth
flowers as they bloom,
as they awaken from their sleep;
I see you in the moon.
I see you pointing to the heavens
in the branches of the trees,
I feel your warm embrace
in the gentle summer breeze.
I see you in the homeless
in their fragile lonely tears,
I see you in the passersby;
their cold and numbing stares
I see you in all humanity
every soul that dwells,
screaming to be heard
in our dark, human shells.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Tell Me What You ... by sassykitty.
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my apalogies, that poem definitely deserved the three applause ;-)
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nice write! Every stanza flowed nicely, they even made me go, "wooohhhh, that was awesome" :-). lol, very nice indeed!
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Thank you for your entry. I love the imagery in this. My only suggestion would be to take out "and" in the last line and replace it with a comma.
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Wow this is so good. very well written i could picture everything as i read i like it alot. My favorite part is when you said "I see you in all humanityevery soul that dwells, screaming to be heard in our dark and human shells." That was worded so great. Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck. ..<3.. Shelly
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this is a very well written affirmation of faith and you describe your feelings particularly effectively through your use of imagery. the use of repetition also works well, and although i'm not a fan of rhyme - mainly because it's something i can't do - this doesn't seem to be strained. thanks for sharing such positivity and good luck in the contest.
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Stunning-
You wrote down what I think, feel, see in our Father. great, great write. loved it!
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excellent
this is full of great lines and it flows so well;love the last verse best.well done.
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And blessed are you
with your gift of "seeing"
and your ability to express the vision!
Aesthete
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This is so very gorgeous and Beautiful and God Bless you so very much and your family
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This has beautiful flow and rhyme to it which carries the reader to a warm place of peace with a breeze of reassurance that touches the soul. Most beautiful poetry! Your faith is admirable
Thank-you for creating and sharing such beauty with us
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We can honor Him very well by acknowledging that we know He is the Creator of all things. That is what this write does. It honors our precious Lord and Father. I so enjoyed the read, and I am sure our precious God is hornored to know you believe and give Him the glory for it. Thank you for entering the contest.
Sam
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"I see you pointing to the heavens
in the branches of the trees"
The whole poem is incredible, but it's that line that I absolutely fell in love with. Beautiful imagery and thoughts, and you see God in nature just as I do. I relate so well to this poem and understand where you're coming from. You have such a beautiful gift for writing and general expression. Keep up the good work!
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wonderful! I really like the ryhme scheme with this piece, and the background you chose compliments it well, very uplifting spiritual piece here, Great write, good wording and imagry. I see and feel your love for the lord.
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This was quite lovely. It was so uplifting. So nice to start my day with such wonderful words. Thank you for sharing this amazing poem. Bless you. Sandy
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"I bring you to life, through my thoughts
I see you everywhere,
I feel your presence in my soul
as you take away my fear.
You follow me and guide my path
as I stumble you are there"
He is indeed always with, and around, us ... in our spirit, in the souls of others, in nature ... everywhere. Lifting us when we fall, helping us overcome adversity. We only need to open our eyes and our hearts, and reach out ...
Wonderful expressions of God's gifts. Good luck in the contest!
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wow...BRILLIANCE has once again shined down from God upon you! The 'you' in this poem is God, no doubt.
>>You follow me and guide my path
as I stumble you are there,
you whisper deep within my soul
of secrets that we share.
yes, everyone that has God share secrets and memories that no other mortal can even begin to comprehend. yes, most people want God to follow them, but I try my best to let Him stay in front as much as possible. though as humans, we tend to try to switch our spots with God as the Guide of our life.
wonderful! an amazing gift God has blessed you with.
God Bless,
Smarelious
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Beautiful praise prayer, If we really look we can see God in all creation. If we don't see Him we are not looking.
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