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smoky scene

Missing image



the haze of her eyes
hypnotize
unwittingly

a commanding performance,
the birds' lull
is in full force

her smoky stare
leaves you paralyzed
and you dance
in those memories


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  • Naridill
    March 2, 2008

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    Would have preferred longer lines to smooth the flow. Other than that - thanks for entering


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    February 13, 2008

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    so beautiful you really create so much more life to the picture which really grips the reader.well done hun