Awaiting this precarious night
of thunder invoked ferocity
where the slightest motion can bring about fatalities
I wait to hear your seamless voice
reverberating in my mind for eternity
ushering me to your breathtaking heaven
where hell’s vicious minions can’t injure us
For I hear nothing except your delightful lightning
Author notes
51 words, 54 including title
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oh i loved the last line.
as for the rest i feel maybe some of the word choice was a bit off; but maybe because of the topic they fit. i say the only word that really seems off to me is eternity. if you'd like to improve it i would look for another word with the same meaning
but hey honestly its beautiful all the same..
thank you for entering
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very nice thank you for the entry and Good luck
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