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A Night Of Dance

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A Night Of Dance

 

 


The thought of a turn round the floor in your arms,
Giving myself to the lure of your charms,
The softest of whispers; comforts and calms,
I’m spending an evening with you.

The music is playing the waltz is so fine,
On kisses and romance, a meal fit to dine,
Feeling light headed, was it the wine?
An evening of pleasure for two.

The music gets slower, the evening will die,
You’re holding me tighter I let out a sigh,
Soon by your side in the dark I can lie
For our long night of loving so true.

Taking my hand as the stars lead the way,
Soft sensual kisses, no words left to say,
Our bodies together in bed as we lay,
Unbounded passions our cue.

The beat of the music resides in my head,
The rhythm of love is now playing instead,
Satin the dance floor that lay on the bed,
Affection is long overdue.

Entwined in our loving all through the night,
Desires are burning, touches ignite,
Emotions are dancing ‘til dawn’s early light,
Together in love, just we two.
 

 

 

 

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This form of poetry should ideally be read with the rhythm of a waltz being played in the back of your mind, I hope you enjoy it.

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  • cgirl0410 silver member
    August 3

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    Quite a movement. I could feel the languid flow of enchantment and wonder. Locked into the strong embrace of a lover's arms. Loved the rhyme, it added even more vivid to the movement. - cgirl0410


  • ladame
    July 1, 2008

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    Cute

    I found this very sweet, and it actually had a little weight in there too.

    Very few dance steps mentioned, but I like the "satin dancefloor" very much.

    Thanks for sharing this with me.
    Sarah


  • lindaburns gold member
    February 17, 2008
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    How Lovely!

    Your dreamy poem is right along the lines of what I was hoping for.
    “The music gets slower, the evening will die,
    You’re holding me tighter I let out a sigh,
    Soon by your side in the dark I can lie
    For our long night of loving so true.”
    Lovely.


  • z etoile
    February 15, 2008
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    I love poems about dancing this is so light and lovely


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    February 13, 2008

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    Aww that was beautiful!!! I got goosebumps. What a romantic sensual piece, with such perfect rhyme!

    Loved it!!


  • Legend silver member
    February 13, 2008

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    I love the form of this piece It does lead one to have the music waltzing around in one head Whether you want it to or not( I did) excellent

  • Zyskandar A Jaimot
    February 13, 2008

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    this is a very fine peice set to waltz tempo - avery good job combining elements of rhyme and timing the consecutive alliterations/rhymes of oo at the endings of each stanza was delightful thanks for sharing regards zaj


  • sapphireangelwings
    February 13, 2008
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    Indeed! I could hear the music and my feet felt inclined to move. Lovely. Simply lovely!


  • Gods-Artgal
    February 13, 2008
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    This is a great poem.
    You are a great poet.
    What was your motivation for writing this poem?


  • rhubarb-tart
    February 13, 2008

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    One of the nicest love poems I've read, not too corny, not too sappy, but still honest. You can give the right words to your emotions, that's a good skill to have!


  • arafura gold member
    February 13, 2008
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    Very nice love poem! The rythm and flow are good and the imagery excellent! Well done!

  • Bad Bill
    February 13, 2008

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    This has everything, Sue--romance, sensuality, beauty, music, moonlight and the seductive joys of the dance! Heady wine indeed. Excellent.

    Bill


  • sharpietatts
    February 13, 2008

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    OOOOH I LOVE IT!!!! I love the rhyme scheme and the flow... and well, everything about it!


  • Patpowers silver member
    February 13, 2008

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    GOOD VALENTINE POEM!

    This is just in my opinion BRILLIANT! Romance,dancing, a great evening all described in this poem! You did wonderful Sue! THANKS!!


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    February 13, 2008
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    Excellent

    This is an Excellent composition--Very well written and versed--Great Flow!!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 13, 2008

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    Stunning!
    I shall look at it critically later but the first two read throughs are pretty well perfect. Love it.


  • Gl1tt3rn1nj4
    February 13, 2008

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    Very enjoyable read. I agree that some lines that rhymed seemed rough, but for the most part it was very smooth.


  • Devils Reject
    February 13, 2008

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    Really nicely done. Very appropriate for this time of year Great write.

  • Virulent Malice
    February 13, 2008

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    I felt you let your write get dictated too much by the rhyme. It seemed like you added a line that didn't need to be there just to accomplish the rhyme.


  • Kiran silver member
    February 13, 2008

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    A beautiful love poem. Wonderfully written and I love the rhyming style! This is perfect!


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    February 13, 2008

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    Very Nice. I really enjoied it. I emjoy the way I can not only read and understand your poems but feel and even place myself in them. Your a really great poet.

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