My heart’s secret is love for you
A passion that grew forever true
Deeper than the deepest sea
Higher than the sky you see
The star within your eye
Kiss my soul with hope so high
You're my destiny, my faith, my sky
It’s you I carry in my heart…why?
You give an incredible life me
A spark of trust and honesty in high degree
So I need no special day to say how I feel
For the love you show I know so real
But if I speak the truth to thee
My love you can guarantee
Eternally I am bound to thee
Because I carry your heart with me
In depth, breadth and height
You blossom in my heart infinite
For the root of our love grows
Into love most perfect rose
Happy valentine my love
With God blessings from above
A contest entry
- I Just Wrote, to Say, I Love You by StormGoddess.
450 points, ended February 17, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Humm..very warm poetry again..and acknowldgements of the sentiments of the love you have shared onece again..thanks for sharing such a beautiful piece...
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My heart’s secret is love for you
A passion that grew forever true
Deeper than the deepest sea
Higher than the sky you see
This part is really better than other parts -
The star within your eye
Kiss my soul with hope so high
You're my destiny, my faith, my sky
It’s you I carry in my heart…why?
this is not only a wonderful poem but also contains powerful expression of feelings and emotions. Its really a good write, i would really be happy to know the author.. -
Wow,
what a wonderful poem,
i really enjoyed reading this.
I look forward to reading more of your poems.
Keep up the good work,
♥ Christina -
While I really like the message and tone of this poem, I am a little concerned about the use of "you" in the first stanza followed by "thee" in the third stanza. It makes the rhyming pattern seem a bit forced to me. But I am just picky that way!
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i really liked this poem. it said so much within it. It was really good.
keep writing,
holly xxx -
i think the idea of a valentine is just so romantic. i never had a real one til this year and now i really do feel like he carries my heart!! like u said.
i like the depth breadth and height part bc i think that combining love and measurement is great, bc love is imemesurable. also bc they kind of rhyme with truth, which is in the line before, which is a cool comparison.
I do kinda wonder why it's a heart's secret, like, this poem doesn't seem like it's trying to hide something but more like its shouting something to the heavens, u kno, for god and everyone to hear, that they love this person. which i DO identify with, and that idea seems so honest. so maybe think about that.
good lucK! god bless. -
You have definately managed to express yourself very clearly throughout the lines of this poem. I'm not completely sure about the use of 'old English' (thee) but that's probably because of the fact that English isn't my maternal language
This felt maybe a little bit cliché, but that's nothing to worry about really
Keep it up!
Leander -
I love how you compare you're valentine to the sky and heaven. I can really feel true love in this write!
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Nicely done with warm expressions of love. Reads nicely to put into a greeting card. Thank you for entering and good luck. Storm
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