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Insomniac


Polluted rhythms of burning breaths
rise, from creased bedspreads;
Crimson alloys of forbidden passion
haunting, in segmented dreams.

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Prompt: Lust 20 words or less

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  • Kuranya gold member
    February 14, 2008

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    Ohh I love the phrasing in this piece, you definately took a great take on this prompt, well done

    Thanks for taking the time to enter my contest, wishing you the best of luck

    Karen


  • Galaxy2
    February 13, 2008

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    Deep...very deep, dearie!..
    You conceal and yet you reveal...
    lustful....

    Kisses!

    Galaxy2


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 13, 2008

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    Sounds like lust is keeping someone awake at nights. LOL! Well done oh brilliant daughter of mine.