perhaps,
if i wrote nonsensical fantasies,
spread,
over,
lines -
i'd come across as more than i am,
bubblewrapped in palatable inertias,
puddled sand walks idly,
abstraction becomes nonsense - and that's the way i like it,
i am deep and brutal,
do,
not,
criticise me;
art is whatever i say it is.
Author notes
Complete pisstake. So titled because a lot of people assume that anything written in words is intrinsically artistic.
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Very thoughtful write! The wording you used was great, as well as the style, putting few words on one line. Good job!
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The few words on one line was a joke: I'm poking fun at poets who do it.
"if i wrote nonsensical fantasies,
spread,
over,
lines -
i'd come across as more than i am,"
And it had the desired effect!
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thought these lines WERE GREAT:" bubblewrapped in palatable inertias,
puddled sand walks idly,
abstraction becomes nonsense - and that's the way i like it,
i am deep and brutal," and the ending fit superbly to the over-all intent!
ARTRINSIC is a fine title and reading first/last together is a unexpected delight "perhaps - art is whatever i say it is" YES! thanks for sharing regards zaj
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The point of those lines is they don't mean anything - I can't be bubblewrapped in an inertia you can taste, sand doesnt puddle, walking isn't idle. I'm pointing out how badly you can use words and still convince people you're an artist. Thanks
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a great write i love the line do not critizise me art is what ever i say it is we all have our own creative paths and each one is unique
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it's a pisstake. art isn't whatever i say it is, it's whatever's beautiful. not everything written in words is beautiful. thanks for taking the time
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Serious and silly at once
Love the metaphors and imagery
+1 you
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