i long to see your face again, I've cried so many nights, for your life was taken from me. who has the right to cause this pain, i went to school one day and you were gone, just becoming a memory in vain. there was so much to resolve, we did not get along. i would like to say i was always wrong, to just hug and love you again.
you were my friend and my sister, now 12 years have passed. I'm so lost, i wish you were here, to be my friend and not just a memory behind glass. i wish you could see me, see who I've become. I'm so different now, i have loved my first girl, your brother has a child. how amazing is that, no one could really contemplate, the effect you now have on me. my psychology is really in the deep abyss of no return. i want you to learn that i did care, and my life now is proof of that, total despair
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A contest entry
- Make Me Sad by hey charlie.
470 points, ended February 20, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For The Deceased by DeadlyTurnip.
1550 points, ended March 24, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I agree with the comments below me, this would've been more effective if it was spaced out. It was so full of emotion though! Thank you for entering my contest, and keep writing
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This is a good poem but I think it would have had more impact on the reader if it were spaced out. Anyway, thanks for entering.
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I almost forgot to say btw I am so sorry for the loss of your sister. My heart goes out to you
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Very touching and full of raw emotion. Not exact exattly what I would call a poem, but it is somewhat what I am looking for, in fact you are alot closer than many of the poems in the contest. Other than the fact that it is so touching and a good write, these are the main reasons why I am not DQing you. So best of luck in the contest my friend
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