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What If?

 Many questions

 very few answers

one comes to mind

I should have told you no

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15/15/20

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  • B Chandler
    March 20, 2008
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    Commentary

    This write can lead to so many different things that the mind can't help but to ask, "What was the question asked?" On the flip side, however the bluntness of the write really fills that 'void' of wondering what is the honest truth of everything. keep penning


    • Ephiphany
      March 20, 2008
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      Thanks

      I really do appreciate your commenting on this, I know my writing can improve, and it is an honor to recieve a Commentary from you.

      E


  • secberm
    February 28, 2008

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    LOL. Short, sweet, to the point. Well done. Looks like you worked through plenty of pain. Outstanding. Sure as crap a lot shorter than my "What if..." poem. LOL Write on, sister. Write on. One.

    Dez


  • Swan song gold member
    February 18, 2008

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    You my dear are Brilliant!!!!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    February 17, 2008
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    Ohhh that's powerful indeed. Gave me goosebumps... well deserved gold!!


    • Ephiphany
      February 17, 2008
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      Thank you again kiwi

      love the name... I appreciate you for this.
      Ephiphany♥

  • Aisades
    February 14, 2008
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    This is outstanding.. VERY outstanding.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    February 14, 2008

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    Powerful in the extreme. Very very tragic this is. Dark and deep and very emotional. Deserved the gold. Well done Piff.

    Much love
    Wayne Leon
    xx


    • Ephiphany
      February 14, 2008
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      Thank you Wayne

      it was a suprise to win glad you liked it.
      E♥


  • McFairy
    February 14, 2008

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    This is tragic!!! I know many parents that have had the exact same thing run through their minds... powerful writing.

    • Ephiphany
      February 14, 2008
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      Thank you McFairy

      I really appreciate your coment on this, and you are so right in your statement. Sad, but true.

      Ephiphany♥


  • Blaque01
    February 14, 2008
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    Short yet so powerful..


  • HaleyMary
    February 13, 2008

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    Very powerful write, Sis. The ending made me think of how sometimes in life we may feel we have made mistakes and we may regret them. Congrats on winning the gold and keep that pen flowing.


  • blueyez
    February 12, 2008

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    And how many times have I said this? Well put...
    Peace and Love


  • ennovy silver member
    February 12, 2008
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    This truly gold! your words speak the throughts of many that wonder "What If" excellent write..congats on the gold love...

    G'Momma


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    February 12, 2008
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    Intriguing


  • Solo Wisp gold member
    February 12, 2008
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    OooooO! This brings the imagination to many conclusions ... I love this take!

    ~Steve


  • HoneyFire
    February 12, 2008
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    NO WORDS CAN EXPLAIN YOUR MEANING HERE


  • MahoganyFlow
    February 12, 2008

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    Love the title for this pic sis! You did a great job with this. I think this would have been a good idea for a contest with one line b/c the pic is so strong and so is the title good luck!


    • Ephiphany
      February 12, 2008
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      Thanks lil sis

      glad you liked it. Im trying to be less long winded...


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    February 12, 2008

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    OH sissy pooh, now this is truly a write after my own heart and soul! you know how i do with these short ones that say so much...and boy did you say A LOT! that last line...was like a punch in the gut for me. intense, this is so out of your style and i think it's truly my new fave at the moment!

    brava!
    Tasha

    • Ephiphany
      February 12, 2008
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      awww sissy poo

      Thank you so much, Im getting used to these shorties u know It really dont take much sometimes. I appreciate you always.


  • Riftkin gold member
    February 12, 2008
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    this is awesome
    your words hold great emotions
    and they pull at the heart strings


  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    February 12, 2008

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    Great take on the prompt! Best of luck to you in the contest!


    -Steve-

  • Nighttime angel
    February 12, 2008

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    WOW

    this is a heart wrenching poem. I was moved by this, I felt a sadness deep within.

    good luck

    kat

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