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I found you

Staring at the starfilled sky,
You lay there sleeping by my side,
Lying in this aerial dream,
How could you end up with me?

Angelic features adorn your smile,
Holding me up all the while,
Cherishing your every step,
Hoping that you won't regret...

Place me in this blissful state,
This sense of heaven you create,
Keep me with you until dawn,
When i wake will you be gone?

Your blazing eyes made of azure,
How much of me can you endure,
Draped in endless grace you sleep,
This memory i hope I'll keep...

Wrapping you to keep you warm,
My calm embrace inside this storm,
This strange affection feels so new,
And all because I found you...







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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    February 28, 2008

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    This is a really good write. I like the unsurety that's in this, you presented it well. Too many times you can be afraid to believe 100% that you finally have happiness. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 25, 2008

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    Lol this sounds like the kind of thing steven would say to me. Feeling he doesn't deserve me and he always wanted to sit and watch me sleep. This is such a sweet poem and it's so understandable, because I want to do that when Steven and I are together this weekend too.


  • Hadji Murad
    February 20, 2008

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    This is quite profound. The flow is gorgeous, the images are amazing and the rhyming is done quite impeccably. I am very impressed. Great job and good luck.


  • Haunting Whispers
    February 19, 2008

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    I am astounded. You are a very talented writer.

    *smack*

    And why did you keep this from me?!

    *smack*

    Lol. Great write. Great emotion. Great everything. No need to be modest at all.


  • Kiryuuofloveandhate
    February 19, 2008

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    Sweet, very sweet i like how each staza tries in with the next instead of being skattered I can tell you are happy to be with who ever it is Good Luck!!!!


  • N e a r
    February 16, 2008

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    ~
    I've felt this many times before... wondering if she will ever leave my side... and yet after 5 1/2 years, she hasn't. I mean this as a friend, because she hasn't been my girlfriend, yet I still love her... I am amazed she has stayed with me after all the crap we've been through.
    This poem reminded me of just that. Beautiful and clear descriptions of a relief and happiness in your life. Lovely write.
    ~

    Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!

    M a r l u x i a


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    February 14, 2008
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    ~~~ Thank you very much for entering this beautiful poem… ~~~

    I doubt that any one will regret loveing someone... Especially someone who can write a beautiful poem like this to them.

    ~~~ Good luck in the contest and hope you enter again ~~~
    Becks


  • Condemd RyeZing
    February 13, 2008
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    A great poem, no doubt. I like it a lot. Great write. Thanks for entering..

  • bazooka1508
    February 12, 2008

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    deep

    i love this poem its one of my favorites that ive ever read!! love it!!! it makes me feel the words not jsut read them. i feel this way for my boyfriend. i can totally relate. i love it!

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