The fight my heart and brain
(Gabriel David Rompf)
I have a dream
a dream that stands firm and strong
A dream with many thoughts
A dream that is being fought
My heart and my brain
2 brave soldiers that fight
Fight for a dream
Fight for the cruel trough
Fight for the special
Fight for the superficial
Fight for the lie
Fight for the truth
But they both see something and that is you!
I gave my life my heart and my brain to you
You broke my heart
You shattered my life
And you screwed up my mind
And I have nothing else to give you
You have broken everything
Today I can’t do anything
Today I am mindless
Today my chest hurts more than ever
You know why
Because today my love for you is severe
Because today I love you more than ever
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I LKE THIS POEM IT SPEAKS OUT TO MORE THAN WHAT YOU THINK,.....THIS IS VERY GOOD....
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It's a tad redundant, you should consider rewriting.
Example:
You have:
"I have a dream
A dream that stands firm and strong
A dream h many thoughts
A dream that is being fought."
Simplified:
"I have a dream
That stands firm and strong,
With many thoughts,
A dream
That is being fought."
Just a suggestion.
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thanks, ill fix it
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Wow really awesome!, keep up the good work
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good poem
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