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me you and L

Sup T it's been a while since you moved.
why didn't you let me know? you know we always had room for you.
but get this, guess who i heard it through,
thats right, my sis, she really misses you.
i sent you a couple of messages but you aint replied.
sometimes i sit at home and wonder "why?"
i just shrug it off forget it with a sigh.
but still i wonder are you dead or are you still alive?
Some day when you’re all alone,
Right now or when you’re old and grown.
Maybe you’ll remember back to this home,
Hey, maybe you’ll even pick up the phone.
Remember back, me you and L
Before everyone moved without wishing well.
Wonder why our friendship ever fell,
Wonder if this song will ever sell…
We use to wanna have a band called BLT,
But that just aint the way it’s gonna be.
Yet growing up there’s something that I’ve seen,
That thought has always stuck with me.
Right now I’ve run out of space,
But there’s still so much I could say about that time and place,
And what we use to do, the look on our faces,
But right now I have to end this case.
I’ll finish up with this last thing that I got to say,
I wish you well, time ‘n time, day by day.

Author notes

this is about me and my 2 friends that moved. the beat is suppose to be like Stan by eminim, i no thats spelled wrong, or Dear Slim pt. 2 by KJ52. btw, i like Dear Slim better than Stan, not that much into eminem...

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  • Symphony
    April 15, 2009

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    I like the inspiration behind this and where you took it - some of hte time, the rhyme sounded forced but when put into the context of a 'dear stan' type, it fit perfectly.

    Nice job - thanks for entering


  • BluRosePoet8488
    October 28, 2008

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    This is a good 'missing you' poem. As the readers reads this, they're not sure if the person dead or just moved. A great just nonetheless! Thanks for entering. keep the ink flowing and good luck!
    ~Donna~


  • Shannon62875
    October 15, 2008

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    aww

    This is a very good write.. i really liked it!!! It was amazing! But a few things... you kinda forced some rhyming and it started out really, really strong but near the end it started to get pretty weak.

    Shannon*Leah


  • xXGoddessofPainXx
    October 10, 2008

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    this is a really cool piece.. I sounds like a song once you read past the third line.. It also makes you wonder whilst your reading, if you were referring to someone whose moved away or is dead.. I liked this piece.. Good work and god luck..


  • Hannie
    October 8, 2008

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    wow i really enjoyed reading this poem....it is very well written!! thanks so much for entering

    Good luck


  • storiesuntold
    March 6, 2008

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    I loved this write

    It seems we all have lived this moment and all thinks back on the days when we were young and wonder where they are

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