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Corpus Cores

 

 

 

smears of absinthe

coat cracked cavities,

where words well

in churning chunder.

 

the aftereffects
of enumerated emotions,
washed with waves of sick;
infected voice-boxes.

alcohol loosened tongues
leak raucous words
that drip slowly
from stretched lips.

the vacant chambers
of mysterious minds
fill with spoiled speech;
word vomit.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Never Fall in Love
    March 12, 2008

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    This is really good - strong, and completely crude - I like that

    Never ♥


  • Everwind Rising
    February 16, 2008

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    Strong stuff! You have many great things going on in this piece. Your imagery is excellent and I absolutely love how you use word sounds.


  • Tangled Angle
    February 13, 2008

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    Well balanced metaphor with emotion. Creative and passionate. Conveyed basically perfectly.


  • Ryno
    February 13, 2008

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    I've heard word vomit somewheres before ... but I donno where ... I really like the idea of that though Well done!


  • Exodus gold member
    February 12, 2008

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    I love the idea of word vomit. The alliteration in this is insane, but only you could make it sound so unforced. I shouldn't have to wish you luck on this one, it's too good not to place

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