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Judgement day

"And I saw a great white throne and him that sat upon it from whose face the heaven and the earth fled away, and there was found no place for them. And I saw the dead, small and great, stand before God and the books were opened, and another book was opened, which is the book of Life, and the dead were judged out of those things which were written in the books, according to their works. And the sea gave up the dead which were in it and death and hell (Hades) delivered up the dead which were in them and they were judged every man according to their works." Revelation 20:11-13.

We judge ourselves, for every word we speak is written
And upon judgement no loose tongues can be unwritten
When your thrust upon God's glorious white throne
Will it be your soul that shall stand lovingly made of stone?
Or will it be you banished alone to the hellish unknown?

The ink is set and the dye is cast
God brings fourth his book of life, highlighting your past
He looks so shocked and you wonder why?
You stand there bewildered, can't think how to reply
Then he points to your wrists, how did you die?
A suicide no matter where and when
To God and his book its an unholy sin
To hell you must go to burn from within

Next stood fourth a man so noble in thought
It was entrance into heaven which this man sought
But God looked at his booked and soon nodded his head
And this mans face so started to fill with dread
God denied him access for he had stolen some bread
But this man was poor and had a family to feed
He did not steal out of his own selfish greed
But God sentenced him to hell, to bleed

Next arose a man with the evilest of minds
His devotion to God was never questioned or undermined

He was a bishop of the cloth and God smiled upon that

His loyalty unquestioned, for he had a cross upon his hat

God didn't even check his book, they just sat having a chat

God opened the gates not even thinking twice

For he did not care about the victims the bishop did slice

For he worked in a church so was absolved of all vice 

So does God judge all equally?

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  • Very Good write

    I believe that if you believe in God and you live your life with love and help others about you no matter how little you have to give you share and you praise him you have nothing to worry about but if you follow others and break his comandments you know in your heart already as does he and will choose accordingly .
    I believe you can be saved by him once in life as you become older and he shall free you of your sins .
    Be not his servant just within the church walls be his servant in all doings all places at all times be the child he has asked you to be and know life at its fullest

  • wow this is really good! It makes one think if what they have done is wrong and if to them it is not, to others it is. Who knew God could think in such a way?


  • Hinata
    June 11

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    oOoOo i love it!u could def. be my poetry teach.
    i dont have a big vocab.so im not that good.i wuv it!

  • true every word

    Every word of this is true...this is so good...talk to me sumtime k...

  • Awsome

    I think it is so stupid to send somebody to heaven without a question of his past. Just because he looked like he was loyal to god. Anyway I think it is really good.
    Love, Emo Kid
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  • Hmm good question... well he probably does but who knows? He is God anyways. I think he does. Do you?

    • Lost Emo gold member
      May 23
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      idk to be honest. Name any man who has so much power thats managed to judge and look apon ppl as equals. i just really don't know but ty for ur comment
  • Sun-shiney
    May 23

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    *crying*

    dont we suffer enough inside and from the pain and the blood we shead. i mean we have to look at the marks till they heal. why make us pay more why dont people understand and just try to help not acuse. just pull us into a hug tell us u care and that u can cry. just let us be loved just let us cry from the pain all hidden inside?
  • Holy cow. Wow that poem is FANTASTIC. Like it's really making me think. And I really don't even know what to say right now. This poem made me speechless. Right now it's one of my favorite poems on ap. Keep it up, you're an amazing poet.

  • I'd say yes

    I think He does, but your talent in just amazing!!! I can't believe you said you've never really written before. This is amazing.


  • CrazyEmoKid
    April 21
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    no

    i think the poem is really good, you have got some real talent!

  • This is great. I loved the last verse

  • Lsh-x
    April 18

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    Very Good poem, I like the Last Verse the best!

    You're a good Poet Kiddo.

    Can you check out my poems? Especially My very own soldier?

    Laura
    <3
  • word20dragon
    April 15

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    Great Write

    This poem is great powerful images. Very refelective,dark but just might speek the truth in how god will judge us on our own judgement day. Just a powerful poem keep writing. I hope you check out some of my writes

  • that was friken sweet=)!!!!

  • wow! this is really, really awesome! this is my favorite by far! Good job!


  • myrataal silver member
    April 6

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    Poet --

    We do not have to wonder how God will judge ... We have to think about our own judgemental attitude. We may not judge. We must separate the deed from the person, for sin is sin, no matter if it is a bishop or a burglar.

    We have life. Life is a gift. Let us love God for the opportunity to be here, to be poets and to share our bread and our thoughts. Make the best of every moment ... it may be your last; the soul crossing your path ... may be an angel. And even if it is not, it is your brother, your sister, or a friend not known yet.

    I believe in the Love and Mercy of Jesus.



    Blessed be.

    Love
    Myra

  • this is very true i wrote a poem to u i hope u can forgive me please
  • Excellent

    I guess that there are many questions, many answers. God has it in his mind how he wants us to be, to live, to end, to go, to die. He has a prewritten scripture and even the suicide, is his planned out going. He has his reasons for needing us, and he has his reasons for needing our end to come soon. It isnt really that we are judged equally or not, it's a matter if we judge him equally or not? God knows what we do, where we go, how we live, but what do we really know about his everyday life? As far as we know, he could be the man standing in the mirror.

  • AbbyxGrace
    March 16

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    this is amazing, i was thinking of this the other day, isn't spreading rumors the same as murder, in the book of sins? they are both a sin and sins are sins, they're equal aren't they? anyways....... this is amazing, you would be doing the world a favour by continuing to write!

    xxAbbyxx


    • Lost Emo gold member
      March 16
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      thxs for ur comment. yea i guess it is the same, but who really can say
  • wow. i really love it. long but delicious. lol (thats what she said) lol jk but i really like it keep it up


  • XxTwigxX
    March 12

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    I love how you put Revelations 20:11-13 in here, it makes the whole thing work so well. Not only that, but it is my favorite book in the Bible.
    I read it just the other day actually.
    Rather interesting twist at the end there.
    Just because they work in churches doesnt mean they have never sinned, or done wrong. But in Gods eyes, he might see it as one of his people and grant them enterance to his kingdom, no matter what.

    I await more of your awsome writing.

    XxTwigxX

  • Amici
    March 9

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    PERFECTION. As the one sunbeam is composed of seven parts, and thus perfected into whiteness—so seven is the divine number of perfection, or completeness.VARIETY. Not absolute uniformity, but variety; the variety which is needful for perfection—the manifold gifts of the one Spirit, sent from the one Christ.UNITY. Seven is oneness; oneness with diversity—one body, many members; one household, many members; one temple, many stones; one loaf, many crumbs; one sky, many stars.
    "And I turned to see the voice that spoke with me. And, being turned, I saw seven golden candlesticks." —Revelation 1:12.

    Fantastic view of Judgement, thanks for sharing.


  • wolfwatcher
    March 5
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    Im glad, God is good :-)

  • wolfwatcher
    March 5

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    Awesome write!!!

    I first off want to say that this was indeed very well written. I can definitely see how anyone could come to those conclusions. I hope its ok, but I would like to show another verse that may help. One of the hardest things to take in, is knowing that good people can go to Hell. I struggle with that a lot. But take a look at Ephesians 2:1-9.
    " 1 And you He made alive, who were dead in trespasses and sins, 2 in which you once walked according to the course of this world, according to the prince of the power of the air, the spirit who now works in the sons of disobedience, 3 among whom also we all once conducted ourselves in the lusts of our flesh, fulfilling the desires of the flesh and of the mind, and were by nature children of wrath, just as the others.
    4 But God, who is rich in mercy, because of His great love with which He loved us, 5 even when we were dead in trespasses, made us alive together with Christ (by grace you have been saved), 6 and raised us up together, and made us sit together in the heavenly places in Christ Jesus, 7 that in the ages to come He might show the exceeding riches of His grace in His kindness toward us in Christ Jesus. 8 For by grace you have been saved through faith, and that not of yourselves; it is the gift of God, 9 not of works, lest anyone should boast."

    The people that God is judging in Revelation 20:11-13, they were already dead in their sins. ("and the dead were judged...") In this case its not talking about a literal dead person (I mean yes he/she is dead, but spiritually dead as well). Meaning the man who stole the bread to support his family... if he accepted Jesus as his saviour, his name would have been written in the book of life. and he to could have made it in Heaven. On the flip side. A lot of those bishops and priests, God will not let into Heaven (they are spiritually dead). Take a look in Mathew:
    Mathew 21-23 "21 “Not everyone who says to Me, ‘Lord, Lord,’ shall enter the kingdom of heaven, but he who does the will of My Father in heaven. 22 Many will say to Me in that day, ‘Lord, Lord, have we not prophesied in Your name, cast out demons in Your name, and done many wonders in Your name?’ 23 And then I will declare to them, ‘I never knew you; depart from Me, you who practice lawlessness!’"

    Many of these bishops and priests, even pastors in churches around, that do these horrible things, but preach the word and use Gods name and cross, will be denied. Simply because Jesus paid for their sin, and they did not accept his loving and merciful sacrifice. God loves you and everyone else. And it isnt works or wearing a cross that gets you into Heaven. It is your turning to Jesus, and having a relationship with our Heavenly father. I hope that made sense, Im sorry that it was so long.





    • Lost Emo gold member
      March 5
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      wow ty for that u made it a lot more clearer 2 me i thank u
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    nice


  • LustForDeath
    March 4
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    wOw That's Really GOOD x


  • xoxoprincess
    February 28

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    wow i agree with you. sometimes life isnt fair, but once you realize it can you only grow and try to change yourself. good meaning. i love how you had written it!

  • Song Of Silence
    February 26

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    Wow.. im silent.. (not normal) i love this poem.. its so beautifully written with thought and care.
    i love the second paragraph
    "The ink is set and the dye is cast
    God brings fourth his book of life, highlighting your past
    He looks so shocked and you wonder why?
    You stand there bewildered, can't think how to reply
    Then he points to your wrists, how did you die?
    A suicide no matter where and when
    To God and his book its an unholy sin
    To hell you must go to burn from within"

    it speaks to me personaly, after growing up in a christian community, i admit i do cut myself but being taght my my mother "suicide mean you go to hell" going against my paster who speaks "suicide can be brought into heaven if they know god.."
    still unaware what to believe... i love this poem it sent chills threw me.. great write.
    --Caitlyn


  • redsundown
    February 23

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    wouldn't we have 2 judge god to answer that?

    now don't get me wrong man i'm down with the devil
    wen it cums time for hell i'll b down on that level
    i got my horns an i got my tail
    but don't question god's love cuz it never fails
    fuk the pope man he's just a faggot
    anotha priest rapein kids a white cultured maggot
    stealin money from the poor
    2 support his dark habbit
    but jesus kept it real he slept in tha streets
    hung out wit tha thugs an all tha people like me
    he didn't judge u for doin wut u had 2 do
    an we cant judge him wut i'm sayin is true


    • Lost Emo gold member
      February 23
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      i hear wat your saying and i agree. its ppl like the pope and the so called bishops spreading his word that disgraces the word of god by commiting sins. But then again it all comes down 2 not judging a book by its cover. thxs for reading and thxs for your comment

  • marciep
    February 21

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    well..no one really knows if god judges us equally..i guess well find out about all of that after we die..but i really like the picture you painted inside this poem..great write!

  • Times Change
    February 18
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    Dave, finnaly something less emo. I love it. Which God is true yours or our vision of him?


  • Applehead
    February 16

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    Does God judge equally? yes He is no respecter of persons. Your God in your poem however sounds very different.

    This is a great read though good steady pace and enough detail and imagery to keep the reader interested


  • crying all alone
    February 15

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    i think this is a great piece of art and you show do more of them because I will be glad to read them
    Love Marie


  • Dont Lose THE ONE
    February 15

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    I think that God does judge people equally. I loved your poem it has so much depth to it. It's an amazing write and really makes you think of where you are going to go when you die. Well, at least it does with me. My favorite lines would have to be 24-31. They are just so powerful make you think now why did he do that. Lol. But this is wonderful. Good Job =] Oh and I love that you started the poem out with a scripture from the Bible it was the first time I have seen anyone do that. I love that you did. Amazing I must say!!! =]


  • sonata
    February 14

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    The greatest wars were fought,
    The highest churches built,
    Petty sins were done,
    Hypocritical punishments dealt,

    Innocents were hanged,
    In the name of the holy,
    At the convenience of people,
    Whose intentions most lowly,

    Read of a letter,
    That came straight from hell,
    Written by the wrongly punished,
    What to them do you tell?

    Beautifully brilliant. if god exists, he had some serious explaining to do.


  • lost19gonesoul
    February 14
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    wow
    very good!
  • Tonya L Turner
    February 14

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    Man you never seize to amaze me with your thinking. You think alot like myself, and about some serious unexplanitory things. Its weird how you question things are opionate your thoughts.I do the sme thing. I dont say I dont believe in God. I will say he gives us something to believe in and that if indeed there is ,he doesnt get enough credit like Jesus did. I dont read the bible, i know a vew verses from going to church as a child.Im Church of God although I think religion should be just that, a religion not types of. I got to thinking one day and said, "Jesus was murdered and everyone watched" I've got one Im going to post I wrote of my thoughts one day while i was thinking. Is commiting a crime a sin or is sin committing a crime? But anyway you need to get out and enjoy some of this fucked of world quit thinking so much, youre young and wise. If you ever need to release words other than poems or have something you just want to get out email me at im_tt@yahoo.com.


    • Lost Emo gold member
      February 14
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      ty for your comment. your proberly right i need 2 get out and enjoy life but i don't see the point to be honest.

  • shadow2050
    February 13

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    wow

    This was amazing it was powerful I really liked the line "We judge ourselves, for every word we speak is writtenAnd upon judgment no loose tongues can be unwritten." this was very good us judging our self badly, is written down on paper really good. You are a very good writer. and this line "God brings fourth his book of life, highlighting your past He looks so shocked and you wonder why? You stand there bewildered, can't think how to reply Then he points to your wrists, how did you die?
    A suicide no matter where and when To God and his book its an unholy sin To hell you must go to burn from within." this was a really good why to put how god would question us on why we wanted to die. good job.


  • here i fall
    February 12

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    wow these words are so powerful... i don't really know if he judges us equally... i can't get past the fact that there just hypocrites in my eyes... so maybe god is different maybe he's exactly like everyone else... i mean after all he did create us in his image... so whats that saying... nice poem... good job

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