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Homicide in Downtown Olympus

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Sprawling, Cupid's a dead duck, thunderstruck,
killer-watt burns turn his back to crackling,
the still-smoking scene of a crime of passion,
here lies the vic, but where's the perp?

A CSI girl and guy bag and tag all the rags,
all the body parts, every slim limb, a pierced heart.
"By Jove!" says Calleigh. And "By Jove..."
says Horatio Caine "... is right!"
Death looks divine, a murder scene's super-cool
seen through Silhouette Titanium 8568s!

A contest entry

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  • Tattboyspet
    February 13, 2008

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    I CANNOT STAND Horatio!!!!!!!!!!
    lmao!
    nice take on the contest though - well done!
    thank you for your entry


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      February 13, 2008
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      Damn... that's me out of the running for a prize then! LMAO.

      Oh but seriously, love him or hate him, the crime scene simply demanded his attendance.

      • Tattboyspet
        February 13, 2008
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        Honestly though, I'm TRULY glad that you didn't pick on the original CSI coz all of them rock! lol
        The way Horatio must ALWAYS have the last say and when he talks he must stand sideways for more of an 'effect' - ARGGHHHH - foolish poop! Sometimes I brave it and watch the story for the story, but my son always laughs at me coz I ALWAYS comment on his crappy acting

        • Mairi bheag gold member
          February 13, 2008
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          Oh they so do! And I almost did... I almost had a line with "Grissom" and "gruesome" in it... But then I thought about Horatio's one-liners, and I heard him in my mind's ear identify the Olympian murderer, with that typical pause (where he puts on or, alternatively, takes off his shades) delivered quarter-face in close-up... and this poem just had to be a job for the Miami team. Honestly, I think the director tells him to do it like that, and he camps it up to 11 (everyone else's ham control only goes up to 10, David Caruso has to have one that goes up to 11!).


          • Tattboyspet
            February 13, 2008
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            ROFLMAO!!!!!!!!! ~million hahaha's~


            • Mairi bheag gold member
              February 14, 2008
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              ... and I told you I wouldn't get a podium place with this!


            • Mairi bheag gold member
              February 13, 2008

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              We could still use another line break - somewhere around HA#25.

              I do so love to make people laugh.


  • adios muchachos gold member
    February 12, 2008
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    Dear Mairi


    This was cute. I hope you do well in the contest. Maybe they should question Cupid's Beau!


  • Amera gold member
    February 12, 2008

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    LOL

    This is great, it made me shoot Pepsi out of my nose. It's original and penned by a master. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥

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