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Who Are You?

I have this feeling
In my tummy
Not sure I undersand
It feels like butterflies
Fluttering around
Not sure why
I think I'm sad
So very sad
Because I'm missing
YOU!
But I feel kinda
Excited?
I guess I know
One fine day
You'll probably realise
What you done
What you threw away
ME!
I hope you'll beg
You love me so
I think I know
Just what
Just what I'll do
I'll simply smile
And say
"who are you?"

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Prompt: a stream of consciousness

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    March 7, 2008

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    I like the stream of consciousness idea, I've done it myself. Very beautiful indeed and most importantly heartfelt. Like the lines it has gone down.


  • Exodus gold member
    March 7, 2008

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    This was really interesting, and rather different from almost all the writes I've read so far. I'm sure this is something many people can relate too. Thank you


  • daviscth silver member
    February 27, 2008
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    Thanks so much for posting in my contest.
    Cathy

  • daviscth silver member
    February 21, 2008

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    I love the little message in this happy go lucky piece. Thanks so much for posting in my contest. I really enjoyed this.