Is it that you hate yourself so much
That the pain tears away at my heart?
Allowing my sobs to openly flow down
My face stained by how easily you lied.
Have I been that unfair to you so far
That love I feel isn't shining through?
Giving all of myself you seem to need
My body and soul drained without thought.
How can unselfish love and bonded trust
I feel be melting away before my eyes?
Knowing in my heart I was ever faithful
My defenses knew how you weren't honest.
Has the efforts endured been so wasted
That you tunneled away at me in time?
Believing it was me who did you wrong
My mind knowing you had failed to see.
Do you treat me as I am only yours in
That you can control me without doubt?
Feeling I am the one to give in to you
My loving stops the pain from entering.
Why do you want to take away my freedom
That gives me only peace within my spirit?
Gaining from your lies the sercuity inside
My resisting nature suddenly becomes alive.
Can it be you'll never share in my dreams
That I would have given strength to you?
My aching heart knowing promises faithfully given
Are lost forever in time for us to share
A love between us forever and always
Destroyed with just one little lie.
Author notes
mountain-woman, this was written because of a marriage filled w/ lies, abuse and deceit that I stayed into for over 15 yrs because I loved him very much and prayed it would change. I like this contest you have presented as I can relate to it vey much.
A contest entry
- Broken promisses... by Wolf Mistress.
1200 points, ended February 23, 2008, 39 entries
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Comments
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Selfish. This is the first word that comes to mind. This person was selfish, thoughtless and blind as you stated. There is indeed so much emotion on this piece, it feels like you truly left a load of emotion and pain into here, and I am glad my contest could have brought that out of you. And yet, of course, the pain still remains but I know it feels good to let others know, to relate and to let out.
You presented this piece very well. From beginning to end you give us your story intertwined with heartfelt emotions and disappointments. You truly do state what were the causes of the failure of this marriage, something I applaud you for because many can't. And yet, it might make it all the more painful..
"Giving all of myself you seem to need
My body and soul drained without thought."
This line really struck me because I have seen this far too many times. It implies so much of your character, and it makes me angry at this person who took advantage of your loving nature and your want to love and to please and yet all they did was take and take without a thought to your emotions; without thought. Perfect ending. Good luck. ♥ -
I think a lot of mostly women can relate to what you went through..I know I can..it sometimes takes a long time before you open your eyes...and knowing something is so wrong and it will never change...knowing you're not happy and loved as you should be....
I am glad you found yourself back again
Good luck in my contest
XXJeannette
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So very well said, you have voiced a lot of emotion with this one...EXCELLENT!
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