Prisoner of Love
My fate is sealed,
And my heart has crashed.
Seems like I pulled the trigger,
And the bullet back lashed.
Drowning in despair,
And an everlasting river of lust.
Seems like I’m chained to the heart,
That I will never touch.
They say it’s better to have loved and lost,
Then to have ever loved at all.
I wish I stayed behind the looking glass.
Because it seems I’ve lost it all.
A contest entry
- broken by darkangelcutter.
375 points, ended March 3, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DFI Round 3 ~ Through the Looking Glass by And Hyetal.
850 points, ended March 15, 2008, 10 entries
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How is It?
Comments
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Imagery: 1 point
Theme: 1 point
Use of Form/Flow: 0 points
Other criteria: 1 point
Overall Appeal: 1 point
The rhyming seemed a little forced in this poem, so it kind of inhibited the flow. But nice imagery and theme here. I really like your take on the prompt.
Thank you for entering!
~Cassie
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GOOD POINT better to have lovedd then lost, i have a question want would you do, would you loved and been hurt cause you lost, or would you never loved and you would have never lost? me and my friends were talking about that the other day, i like this
blessing
good luck
shannon
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