Nails hammered into her body
Crude figures carved into her skin
She stands tall
Her children ripped from her arms
Their flesh greedily devoured
She stands silent
Friends and family brutally murdered
Dismembered and mutilated
She stands alone
Author notes
I got the idea for this one after seeing a tree near to a telephone pole. It struck me that it was like standing next to your dead brother. Morbid, I know, lol. Your prompt about the bark on trees made me think of this one. This is actually a pre-write, for some reason the 'enter a pre-written poem' thing isn't working for me.
A contest entry
- Affective Effects by FlurryOfDancingFire.
525 points, ended March 5, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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i once read a poem like this called how to kill a living thing, and really enjoyed it, much like i enjoyed this. it is a great piece of work.
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Short and sweet
As brief as this piece may be, it still carries its own pride; its own power. I actually really like this one. The way you progressed from 'standing tall' to 'standing alone' brings wonder to words. The analogies between family members and the brutality of the world are clever and well thought-out. This is high-quality work! Best wishes for you in my contest.
~Flurry
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