Lungs are heavy, Breaths are short,
Senses of pleasure,
And tempting whispers of retort,
Overwhelm me.
With submerging desire,
To acts of lusts,
Shred my Attire,
And take me.
Take it savagely,
Don’t stop, give it rough,
Bite and Ravage me,
And make me scream.
Tensions high with Seduction,
Our hearts race,
With no reduction,
We’re almost done.
With the sensation of release,
We relax our bodies,
The pressures cease,
And the pleasure has ended.
For now
Author notes
I dont think i did as good as a job on this one but its worth a shot!!
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Comments
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Hehe x Very Hot write xx Thankyou for your entry xx good luck xx
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aye - there are other times to rekindle the fire of pleasure in life, we all like to dance to the tune of love
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I like how you show but not tell.. Usually, readers encourage the "show, don't tell" theory, but this is the opposite.. Yet the telling is not straight-forward. It is more of the action speak louder than words concept. I think this is pretty good, especially concerning the previously stated response. Excellent. Thanks for entering.
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A very spicy and sultry piece!! Loved it!
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Wow...lovely...and hot...
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You forgot to put "Prayers" (without quotation marks) in your author's notes. When you do this I'll read this. If it's not there by around 11:00 PM eastern standard time I'll DQ this.
Thanks in advance
Aden Recreated -
Hi,
Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
I wonder if those scratches will leave marks?
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