Spending far too much time in yesterday
I know it's time to let it all go
If you're in Heaven, and looking down on me
This is what I want you to know:
I can still hear the words we said
I hate you, never want to see you again
Words are just words, but they cut so deep
And, for me, I guess this was the end.
Bags were packed, and in my car,
A last goodbye, yeah I'll call you.
glance once more in my rear view,
The Rage I felt drove me far..
I drove all night and only West
Music my one companion
Houston passed before I could think
I would not even slow down..
I didn't think about when we met
Or when you asked me to marry you
I wanted Space to be my intent
On the life I'd have without you.
Little did I know, little did I care
That I was walking out on our Forever
All I knew, I wanted away from You
Forever was replaced by Never..
The nights and days blended
The guys were all the same
Here's to Life without you
Honestly was I the blame?
You tried like hell to change
A girl who wouldn't be remade
What you loved about me
What made me special and free
You tried to control the Wind.
You took it upon yourself
To be my judge and jury
When I didn't change
or for you, rearrange
You held me in contempt
For you, I wasn't worthy..
I found out that wasn't true
I was worthy enough, without you
I found my Peace, my own way
I'm not the same person today..
Is it too late to say I'm Sorry?
For the stupid shit I caused?
If it's not too late and I am worthy,
Will you accept it and since your dead,
Move On?
May you rest your troubled head
Upon coats and remains of the dead
But please, please, I ask you
Leave me be
You memory will always be with me..
I loved you once with all I was
I'm saying Sorry now
Just Because..
Author notes
This is a true story. It is about the break up of a six year marriage, and my subsequent move to California. It's fairly explanatory, but some might not think so.
Peace
T
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options
2)Anything about loss
3)Death
"You are a Monkey with purple Hair" Mine's pink
If it doesn't work for the confines of your contest, you won't hurt my feelings.
Peace
A contest entry
- OPTIONS, PROMPTS AND TITLES by my1lovewearsdiapers.
600 points, ended March 4, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - vows,marriage,divorce,seperated..till death did you part..pw,s ok.. by Honeydew.
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this is really great..thank you for entering.
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How true this is, most guys like you for who you are one minute then want you to change the next. nice write
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"You took it upon yourself
To be my judge and jury
When I didn't change
or for you, rearrange
You held me in contempt
For you, I wasn't worthy.."
Not only that part..
THe whole poem stayed true to it's meaning with no fall backs. You can feel the emotion and regret...It can all be related.
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This did one thing that is fairly and squarely the poet's job - it looked for emotion, then mined it deep until it hurt. Language a little prosaic, but - hey! - who needs metaphor when you can express like this. Good luck in the contest.
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SO much emotion here...WOw..
I really like this piece
A sad haunting story well told
Lynda
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This one reminds me of my marriage, and how everything went to Hell in it, and how I have often felt about things, and it's funny how, when you think of the good things, it blinds the pain and sadness...This is a really emotional piece, Jin ...
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This is such a very emotive piece of thought penned within these lines. Well spoken and expressed throughout. Sad, endearing, and quite poignant. An ache begging for its own release. Nicely done!
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Great
Wowza
This was incredible
I can not believe the rhyming in that
you rhymed
and was deep
*appluads*
this was a lovely write. I enjoyed reading it
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Jesus. As much as I hate leaving short comments, I really don't know what else to say for now. I loved it.
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