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Exile


She stands alone
Holding the suture gently
That encloses her burned heart
Blocked from having her own life
Deficient of her own wishs
Exiled from her own kind

Unaided; She walks
The path she is meant to
Maybe not the path she wished
Barbed wired clouds
Slip across her vision

Leading a life of pledge
Deported from their hearts
Into an unknown life




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title Exile i hope its ok

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  • Lexie -
    February 26, 2008

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    i love this

    its full and raw and has the sense of telling only a little of the tale
    letting the reader wonder about the rest


  • brightXdarkness
    February 13, 2008

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    I didn't read the poem. Honestly, I was wayyy too distracted from the background (although right now I feel as if I have ADD to the MAX lol and the worst attention span I have ever had)! This background is so pretty! I wish I could make backgrounds.... especially a background like this. The pictures are so pretty that I can't stop staring at them! YAY! PRETTINESS!

    ...ok... I'm going to stop this comment now. It's not even about the poem that I didn't read lol. Sorry!

    Alex


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    February 12, 2008

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    this is such a deep and poetic piece it holds alot in your words with a twist of dakrness well done beautiful sis


  • Joel E. Beezley Jr.
    February 12, 2008
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    d E E p

    quite deep and heartfelt..reminds me of Evanescence's music..

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