I can see the heart
of your thoughts laid bare,
your pupils refracting light,
splitting with the realization that
only you can alter your steps,
And move past perceptions
that you've held so tight
in a youth tortured by the unknown.
You are climbing mountains to find
these truths rising and the shimmer
of clarity floating free and true,
doubts left behind, taking today
into your future.
(c) Debby Sorensen Carlson
February 11, 2008
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Hoodwinked!
Excellent word choice that created a vivid effective piece. It was thought provoking and something that I think many can relate to.
Shari
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Honestly words of wisdom all youth need to hear. It is overwhelming how little we see and when the elders offer help we turn them down only to fall into ruin... The curse of ignorance I guess.
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Z
It is part of being young. Time teaches us may things. Hopefully, we learn. Thank you.d -
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Hopefully, or we learn from the generations of the past. The less mistakes that scar other lives forever the best.
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Wise words
Something that I needed to hear years ago but a strong message nevertheless. Smart poems that causes one to ponder. Now that is a good thing
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Bob..
Thank you so much..I would have written this sooner but I had to get to where I had clarity..lol. I think it comes with God and age. Blessings. Debby
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How interesting, I am very impressed. Keep up the hard work
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Mystwolf
Thank you very much !!!!
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A lovely write displaying the journey we take into clarity. Good job!
I really like the middle stanza...
"And move past perceptions
that you've held so tight
in a youth tortured by the unknown."
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Rashae
Thank you. I am so glad you enjoyed this piece. Blessings. Debby
pss.. thanks for adding me to your favs !
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