Computer Malaise

I stare
in catatonic calm
slightly aware
of gaping mouth
scratchy dry eyes.

Computer malaise...

Enthusiasm
has fled to bed
ahead of me
vexing veracity
of my intent
not to mention
need
to slumber
adequately tonight.

Author notes

an "in the moment write" yikes

A contest entry

This is how I feel... by SummerlandRayne. 529 points, ended February 19, 2008, 17 entries
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natchstucco
February 12, 2008

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Oh how sometimes one can come up with such intuitive writes on the edge of subconscience. very well put forth. great take on the prompt.

SummerlandRayne
February 12, 2008

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Oh and YES! In that moment I have been...thoughtful and impulsive! Thank you and best of luck!!!

Az

azure85
February 12, 2008

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Wow, that computer at times! Your poem describes theanxiety and hypnotic attention this device brings to us, and what would we do without it! Good luck in the contest!

rainz3d
February 12, 2008
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This is an excellent piec

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