You've stopped talking now,
to finally make it stick.
I feel though that
"I'm done"
is something i can't understand.
I watched her move
her hands in my place-
watched the space
between us grow
little by little,
every inch.
So close,
but can't touch.
I can't sleep,
I just want to sleep.
Now the song keeps playing,
"I fear I might break"
Oh if I can hold
this searing back,
survive the burn until
February.
Those Two Days In February.
No, not another song!
" I don't think that
I've confessed everything
I feel".
Why am I rooted to this bed,
to this town,
to this moment,
when you are so free to grow?
I feel as though my
branches have withered.
So sallow now, with flat eyes
like the walking dead.
I don't want to die,
just to sleep
and hold you again.
But I can't move,
and you're too fast.
I'll never keep up.
Author notes
The first guy I ever truly loved... and i still do- not the same way as i did, and i've moved on, but i'll always care.
A contest entry
- MOVING ON - Breakup Poetry - Options by Girl With Guitar.
625 points, ended February 16, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Confusion by Zerstort.
350 points, ended April 8, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
No specific question, just what you think: good or bad.
Comments
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This was really good, I could relate easily to this poem. Don't we all have one of those lost loves. Though on second thought, at least we had one of those lost loves, some never know what love feels like.... I am saddened with that thought..and the saying "better to have loved and lost, than to have never loved at all" comes too mind. Congradulations on your well deserved bronze.
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Great poem!
I love it. You've captured the emotion but have done so subtly. Well done and good luck in the contest though you won't need any luck.
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Wow, this is really sad. I hope things get better for you soon. The emotion is very seering. Good luck in the contest.
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"Why am I rooted to this bed,
to this town,
to this moment,
when you are so free to grow?" -- Oh HELL yes. Perfection!!
Thank you for the entry, first and foremost. Secondly, this is exactly what I was hoping for with the teenage option. And you also happened to describe the freaking reason I made this contest!! Brilliant work dear.
♥Tomorrow
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