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Surrender

Surrender your feelings
Surrender yourself
I know you are trying to hide

It isn't working
So just Surrender

Author notes

only about 16 words but I think that's okay

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  • Seeking Peace silver member
    February 14, 2008

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    This is a good piece, maybe a little more alliteration and metaphor would be good, but nice job

    Thank you for taking the time to enter, wishing you the best of luck

    Karen