I am hiding in the corn
I am the voice inside your head
I am that nagging twitch
that makes your brain itch
the chill under your bed
been with you since you're born
I hate the way you mock us
and pick on us with ease
look close my friend and you will see
that I am you and you are me
*bends down on scared knees*
kill me now, what's the fuss?
That's it now, walk away
cast your shadow over someone new
go play your games
and take your aims
'cause this is what you always do
and leave us still this day
you laugh because were different
you scold because were lame
joke because were broken
but know I am awoken
I laugh because YOU'RE all the same
it's us that live indifferent.
Author notes
Wanted to try a new method, don't know if it worked.........PLEASE COMMENT.......
A contest entry
- A Little Of Everything by Firequeen.
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Comments
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Ooooo
dark, chilling and really cool!
hehe
i really enjoyed this,
good luck and thankyou
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I tried to comment on this a few times but it kept throwing me back to your main page.. I think its a conspiracy. So I wrote my comment in word. hopefully this works
In the last line of your first stanza....I think that "you're" would sound better as "you were"
The line... "Kill me now, what's the fuss?" .. I dont think it really flows that well. The last stanza, first three lines.. were should be we're ???
... I know I am awoken... .I thik awoken should be awaken??
I think that the last line kind of leaves the reader wondering... it doesnt feel like a complete thought....
I do like this. I think it is true... being different makes us who we are. I never judge a book by its cover. You might miss a great read if you did. =)
Criss -
this lefft me with many different thoughts throughout and has left me thinking now.a beautiful piece well done
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