You're counting your last breath until you stop living,
and no matter how hard I try I cant find the words to tell you “you're special“.
Your screams bite out into the cold but all they find is silence,
searching their way for what seem like eternity to find the comfort of love.
They gave you their best and all, but nothing to make you want to keep on breathing
or look into the light and want to keep on striving for forever.
I’ve seconded your skin in which diamonds are encrusted forever,
and you tell me you don’t want to go on living.
I soak the clouds in my tears in an attempt to keep you breathing.
And we come back with stained skin, that screams nothing but special.
We tried to lift the cracks, glue you back together and make you love,
only you can, but find nothing in return. The pretty pictures scream in silence
and you find it haunting. Somewhere is a siren but everything fades to silence.
You trace the words of ‘pain’ in your heartbeat, something that felt like forever,
embedded like affection never was, just cold blades that never taught you love.
The stars carry on shining, but what use it when you ache and despise living?
You fold under the words special
because you don’t believe the words that you need to keep breathing.
Too many times you’ve held on, watching a sea of faces and not breathing,
suppressed you a in corner, biting into the flesh of blue silence.
Silver girls and their golden tears didn’t seem that special,
And that hurts because it seems like you forever.
I want to show you that I could help you go on living,
I want to fingerprint your heart in the colours of my love
And trace those lips in to a smile when you think of love,
watching your chest rise up and down in your shallow breathing.
I’ll take you to the land of living,
take you to the edge of the world to escape and hear silence,
breath in the cold and life. Patching together pieces so we don’t forget forever
and the sleep at the edge of the world to taste the paramount of special.
There will be a way to stop the pain, there is no limit on special,
The way you make me smile is the best, and I am forever in debt to your love
With these broken pieces you are attaching together, they are in debt forever
I constantly need to know you’re breathing.
We latch onto the silence of a future,
See the sun warm on our skin, and smile, I want to keep you living.
Chase the rainbows for forever, I know that you’re special
And as long as I keep living, I will value this love.
I know you kept me breathing, when I felt there was nothing else but silence.
Author notes
Does it really seem so small?
I know I used to really love her.
I don’t know where that went.
This was written at a time I really did.
And finished off at a time I didn’t. But I can still remember that love.
So it still has all the emotion of my love.
this is a sestina, i written after taking one of the class here on AP.
if you don't know what that is look here
http://allpoetry.com/assignment/show/868.
or just check out another written one
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2719244
started this 24th novemeber 2007.
finished today.
i suck at deadlines, this was meant to be part of a christmas present!
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Very well done, and bursting with raw passion. The form was also well done, and my only critique would be that you tend to repeat the same emotion, albeit with different imagery, but it does get slightly tedious. Otherwise, nice poem.
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i understand what you're saying, but in some ways i don't.
is it because the theme was mainly focused on love?
or that the words kept repeating?
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oh that was so beautiful.
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Very Ctchy title. It sure draws the attention of anyone looking for a good poem to read. And they will not be dissapointed. Great write
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thank you.
i really like the title too <33
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Breathtaking
I can`t even find words for this. It is beautiful. It took my breath away. My favorite part is:
"Somewhere is a siren but everything fades to silence.
You trace the words of ‘pain’ in your heartbeat, something that felt like forever,
embedded like affection never was, just cold blades that never taught you love.
The stars carry on shining, but what use it when you ache and despise living?
You fold under the words special
because you don’t believe the words that you need to keep breathing."
BRAVO!
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this is beautiful, love the third stanza.
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This is absolutely beautiful. I don't even know where to begin. If I copied and pasted, the entire piece would be here. lol. This was intense...so deep and heavy. But absolutely beautiful. My words feel small and insignificant compared to this. When I read your work, I feel as if you painted the words across the page...like a canvas of poetry. Gah. I love this. And I'm getting flustered because everything I write sounds cliche and I feel as if I'm not expressing my thoughts for this piece as strongly as I wish I could.
Anyhoo,
I'm bad with deadlines too. I want to write my girlie something for Vday...except, I haven't even started yet. I'm running on empty.
ily. ♥
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thaank you baby, yours words are so lovely <33
keep on trying with your poetry, it's sure to come out :]]
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you are most welcome, darling.
<333
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